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Academic writing task 2 - The influence of modern world to a healthy lifestyle


irfan727 49 / 68 29  
Sep 11, 2015   #1
Question :
Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others,however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience


At present, having a healthy lifestyle is prominent to prevent from critical diseases. Several individuals argue that it is hard to become healthy. Moreover, some assume that is false, they can be fit since they live in the advance century. I firmly believe that there are two views on this issue which people debate.

In huge cities have found many consumers preferred to alter a fast-food menu, because they do not have much time for cooking their food. A study, which was done by the Health Education Authority, aged 15 to 34 years are the most consumers who choose fast-food. For example, they tend to grab McDonald's food at hurry time. In several circles, it has been a citizen's lifestyle. With this habit, it can make people become addiction. It is caused that food contains high-fat and flavouring. The effect, inhabitants would gain illness likes obesity and cancer.

However, in this modern era, people can obtain everything easily, they may not ignore their healthy condition. That is because preventing is better than cured. For instance, residents who ill sure spent more much cost in their life. Furthermore, they try to keep their hygiene with several activities like sport which it has benefit for metabolism and regenerate bodies' cell, taking a quality rest also influence to the health with improvement of anti-bodies. Evidence of this can be seen with several exercises and have better relax can affect great life.

In conclusion, although some people argue there are difficult problems especially in health case, I would argue this can be solved by various activities.

Bayuwibowo 48 / 73 21  
Sep 13, 2015   #2
-where is your thesis statement in introduction ?

Let me try with mine :
red means thesis statement

An unhealthy lifestyle means more illness and more expense to treat those illnesses. This type of lives has undergone by modern human generation this day. While several people think it will be hard for changes the habit, others perceive healthy lifestyle is easy to reach. In my own opinion, due to many inventions have been brought by researches nowadays and work hour takes most of our time, it leads inhabitants to have a poor health ; I would argue that good habits depend on the person willingness and in this modern era, it is very easy to find any information about live in healthy life.

- I think it very short conclusion, yous re-paraphrase your thesis statement and make your suggestion.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Sep 23, 2015   #3
At present, having a healthy lifestyle is prominent [...] this issue which people debate

People in the pace of modern life are unlikely to have unhealthy lifestyles. While it is true, since many people are struggling with sedentary activities, I would argue that with doing some regular exercise and having balanced diet are the best way to stay fit and health.


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