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According to eg Carl Jung the colors cure mentally illness patients by the art work in psychotherapy



SHanafi 120 / 357  
Oct 8, 2014   #1
Psychologist have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals.

How true this statement?

How far colour influence people's health and capacity for work?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Colours have a great impact on people's lives. Recently, modern psychologists hypothesize that some colours in the building interior influence the mood states of workers and patients while the opponents assume that people's feelings cannot be explained with the colours provided. I believe that colours in appropriate mixture can actively boost the positivity among its occupants.

Colours and human's feeling are already discussed for long time. All our lives, people have been trained to respond to colours through our action and feeling. An actual example can be seen in the way people conducting their manner while driving or crossing street. In terms of red means stop, yellow means careful and green means go, people instinctively react to colours due to the preconditioning of their minds. While people experience a rush of emotion when run a red light, colours prove its power to influence people. Moreover, in some countries colours may associate with certain mood. A result shows that 35% of Americans express the feel of coziness with Blue. Besides, the adequate outcomes from colour experiments say that red gives the sense physical courage, and violet gives the sense of calmness. Furthermore, as the power of colour, interior design nowadays tend to consider its mixture to deliberate people's mood. A landmark study conducted by University of British Columbia reveals that blue environment can deal with productivity while The Hufftington post publishes that combination of slate blue mixes with olive green and soft cream has helped to foster a team environment. The aforementioned evidences align the colours-emotion association.

On the other hand, colour's power is not merely related to people positivity. A research in Florida University reveals that there is no significant finding to determine anxiety level, length of stay or medication request depend upon the color of patient room colour with a mild tone shape of purple, green and orange. Then, the refutation of mood improvement based on the colours can be accepted.

In conclusion, the energy of colours are widely used in decorating particular buildings to bring positivity to the people. In another case, the colours effect may not seen significantly in healing process. However, I believe that the statement that colours can effect people feel is true as the wonderment of our emotions in connection to colours exist in our daily lives.

Thernis 1 / 1  
Oct 9, 2014   #2
You alternate between color and colour, it might be best to just stick with one way of spelling it as it can distract the reader from the content
MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Oct 9, 2014   #3
Colours have a great impact on our lives.

According to psychologists, the colours affect our emotions andthe way we feel .

our emotions are greatly affected by colours.

to suit the mood of the occupants in offices and hospitals

when it comes to the interior design of offices and hospitals.
I don't think "occupants" is the right word used with "hospital".

Color and human's feeling was already discussed for long time

The relationship between color and feelings has been the focus of many scientists for a long time.

color association

color-emotion association

mentally illness patients

mentally ill patients

colors can also effect affect human feeling

In US, people express their coziness with blue and gold already used by Jung in psychotherapy.

This example adds no value to your conclusion and it has been used in your first paragraph.

You have many interesting examples in your essay; however, your writing style makes me feel like reading a journal article. In each of the paragraph, you should state a reason, give an explanation and then give examples for it rather than listing all examples.

Hope it helps!
vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 9, 2014   #4
Shanfi, since this is an IELTS test, please make sure that you spell all of your words in the British and notAmerican English method (coulour is British, color is American). The differences in grammar make a big difference in the way the reader receives the or perceives your written work.

Colour have a great impact on our lives. According to psychologists, the colours affect [...]

- While this is an effective introduction. More can still be said to help people develop a better understanding for the basis of the prompt prior to its restatement in the paragraph. Presenting the reader with an analytical situation about the way they react to colors would have been a good hook to entice the reader to read about the opinion of doctors about the effect of colors on the mood of people

. Shanfi, the essay is missing your voice. your opinion, which is very important in supporting this essay, is nowhere to be found. It is a requirement of the essay prompt. While you mentioned an opinion in the opening paragraph, you failed to build upon it in the latter paragraphs. You must make your opinion known and you must make sure that it supports the stand that you have taken. This is the only new idea you can introduce prior to a new concluding paragraph.
OP SHanafi 120 / 357  
Oct 10, 2014   #5
All of the coaches, thank you for the valuable comments.

Presenting the reader withan analytical situation about the way they react to colors would have been a good hook to ...

In each of the paragraph, you should state a reason, give an explanation and then give examples for it rather than listing all examples.

These are my problems.

Honestly, I am confused to breakdown this prompt. Particularly, which part of the prompt that I should underline. I already read some sample answers with similar prompt, but none of them quite answered the task responses to me then it makes me difficult to break the prompt in my intro and also in the bodies. If both of you are willing to give me an actual example that I can learn, I would be great for me. Thank you :D


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