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Writing Task 1: ADULT LITERACY RATES IN SEVERAL DIFFERENT COUNTRIES AROUND THE WORLD


keira107 1 / -  
Jul 4, 2021   #1

Task 1: The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.



The table compares literacy rates for the adult population who are at least 15 years old, both the female and the male in four different countries and the world as a whole.

It is clear that the percentage of male literacy is higher than that of female rate. Overall, the total proportion of people who know how to read and write in the world is 82%. The number of literacy people in Country D is highest, while country A has the smallest literacy rate.

Two countries having literacy rates higher than the world rate are Country D and Country C. Country D is the only nation to have the same rate for both the male and the female populations. This country also has the largest literacy rate, almost 100%. The figure for Country C is slightly lower, at 90,3%.

By contrast, the country with the highest total number of people who don't know how to write and read is country A, about 52% of the total population. Especially, the female literacy rate is twice as large as that of the female people in this country. In terms of Country B, 50% of the total population know how to write and read, whereas the difference between the male rate and the female rate is very large. The male rate (70,5%) is more twice as much as that of the female (30%).

To all who clicked into this page, this is my first attempt to practice IELTS writing test. I'm still learning and practicing to fulfill my goal. Thanks for your advice <3



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Jul 5, 2021   #2
The word count is too much for a Task 1 reporting essay. The overall essay, as written, would take about 40 minutes to write. That presents a problem when the writing time provided is only 20 minutes for this task. The essay is meant to bea summary report of the main and comparative features of the chart. An analysis is unnecessary as a personal opinion is not required for this part of the witten test.

The summary portion is to be presentend in at least 2 sentences, 3 being ideal. The presentation is a run. on sentence, indicating an early scoring decduction for the examinee. It is difficult to keep track of the compressed information as there are no pause points to allow the leader to understand the essence of the sentence.

The countries are provided in alphabetical order.The comparisons should be done by pair as well (A&B, C&D ). Develop a quick analysis writing style. Completely report and analyze within 175-200 words. Avoid mentioning an actual measurement in the trending statement. Those should always be integrated into the report paragraphs.
ducdepzai123 1 / 2  
Jul 6, 2021   #3
Personally , you should not write long summary , use 1 or 2 sentences for this , choose only 2 main features to indicate these in summary
Maxi_0511 1 / 2  
Jul 7, 2021   #4
@keira107
I think it is not good to use contractions in writing task 1 since you are writing a report not an opinionated essay.


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