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The advancement of machines cannot solve novel situations which can merely be conducted by people



zul2805_es 7 / 17  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
TED Summary: Anthony Goldbloom - The jobs we'll lose to machines - and the ones we won't

Anthony has niece who has father as a lawyer and mother as a doctor. Over the time, when his niece became adult, the parents jobs are becoming extremely change. It happens because the jobs has been replaced by machines which are known as artificial intelligence.

In early '90s, machine learning initially utilized in the industry which helped simple tasks. This day and age, it immensely improve since it can conduct complex assignment such as grading an essay and diagnosing diabetic people.

However, the advancement of machine still has curb. It cannot solve a novel situations which can merely be conducted by people. A person can solve a new problem that he or she never even face it. This is that the ability of machine cannot tackle the issue.

arisandy14 7 / 11  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Perhaps this can be some corrections.

the word--"becoming extremely change"--it will be better if changed to be "becoming change extremely", it because extremely cannot be modifier of change.

the word "initially utilized", you probably mean that it is passive, so it becomes "was initially utilized".

the word "it immensely improve" = it immensely improves

the word "a novel situations", becomes (novel situations/ the novel situations) because article a/an for singular noun.

thanks may those be useful.


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