Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
As people gain more access to technology, working and learning from home has become the method chosen by many grownups and children. From my perspective, although many people can be beneficial from this development, its negative impacts still outweigh and cannot be ignored.
On the one hand, it is understandable that people choose remote working and studying due to its merits. The first and also the main advantage is that working and learning from home is more convenient. As both adults and children can easily arrange their tasks based on their timetable and job priority, people no longer need to depend on a fixed schedule. Secondly, the development in technology makes it possible for everyone who is qualified enough to work and learn overseas through a computer. People have more chances to approach a wider range of knowledge and job positions.
On the other hand, working and studying from home also brings many significant disadvantages. Firstly, it badly affects life quality as people may lose real-life interactions when they spend too much time using technological equipment. Recent studies have shown that an individual's happiness is positively influenced by the quality and quantity of relationships with people around that person. Secondly, health problems related to the excessive amount of time used to look at screens may be caused by remote working and learning. For example, children can become short-sighted and adults may face heart diseases and obesity as the result of lacking physical exercise from spending too much time sitting in front of screens. Thirdly, it can be easily interrupted as the internet connection may not be stable enough to ensure working and learning from home. Moreover, there is a thread from personal information leaks as high-technology criminals are eager to exploit holes in information security and financially take advantage of these holes.
In conclusion, it is beneficial for people to work and learn from home. However, humanity must take its weaknesses into consideration.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,844 
4785 The prompt restatement is only halfway right. You forgot to restate that the reason who the rise in remote work and learning is the affordability of technology / gadgets. That is an important and integral part of the original discussion. Missing out on that sentence has reduced the accuracy score of your restatement. Good work on the personal opinion presentation though. It is definitely clear and to the point, but could have used a summary of the negative topics for discussion.
At 327 words, the essay is overwritten and may not result in a completely written essay during the actual test. Since you are expected to time yourself and divide the 60 minute writing task between the task 1 and task 2 sections, you need to pay attention to your word count. Stay within the timed word parameters of 200 words for task 1 and 300 words for task 2. That way you can be sure that you can double check your essay for prompt accuracy after completing the draft. In this case, you wrote a long essay but did not offer the expected written response so the length was not helpful to your final score. Your essay still failed the test.
You are asked if this is a positive or a negative development. You chose one opinion to present in your opinion section. So defend that single opinion. You are not being asked to balance the discussion between the 2 opinions, you are to support your single opinion instead. Without the need to try and explain the opposing side.
This is the main reason why the essay cannot be given full scoring marks. You opposed yourself in the discussion presentation. By contradicting yourself, you are creating a confusing discussion presentation that does not support your original opinion. You cannot receive a passing score.
