IELTS Task 2 : Advertisements are benefial to people or not ?

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, increasing number of people are highly influenced by advertisements which is also act as a major deciding factor in order to purchase an item in the market. This widespread trend creates different opinion among different group of people. Some people believe that advertisements are significantly helping them to explore the market and to obtain necessary information about new products, while, others think that these advertisements merely causing them to spend more money lavishly without having actual necessity. In my personal view, in order to be knowledgeable on current products and various latest promotions, advertisements are largely beneficial.

First of all, in today's context, people don't have time to roam around the market to identify their best suitable product. In that case, advertisements can help people to aware of various brands available in market and enable them to distinguish their best suitable products in terms of quality and budget. Secondly, people can be constantly aware of the latest promotions which will help them plan their purchase to save money rather than spending regular price on different brands. For example, budget airlines especially Tiger Airways use to release many good offers like "Pay for One-Way and return for free" in flight fares, but for limited duration of booking period. Therefore, without advertisement people cannot utilize such highly beneficial deals.

Another supporting factor in favour of advertisement is knowledge about new innovations. Due to ever-growing technological improvements, electronic devices and home appliances have undergone major disruptions. Again, advertisement is the only fastest way to promote such new features among people and help them to lead a comfort living by using latest sophisticated appliances. For example, nowadays smartphones gains tremendous popularity among people, only because of advertising its significant features and its benefits.

In conclusion, advertisement is a significant thing which is useful for both producer and consumer by catalyzing the business and purchasing the good quality products in a better deal respectively.

I find your vocabulary to be one of the best aspects of your writing. I also don't have anything against your arguments and examples.

Overall, it is quite a nice piece of writing.

8,5/9

advertisements which is also --> are
different opinion among different group of people. --> opinions, groups
while, others think --> while others think
advertisements merely causing them --> cause or force

people don't have time --> do not have time (should not use contraction)
budget airlines especially Tiger Airways --> budget airlines, especially Tiger Airways,...
use to release many good offers like "Pay for One-Way and return for free" in flight fares --> usually introduce (more appropriate here) ... on flight fares

promote such new features among people --> you should explain what are new features?
For example , nowadays --> For instance, you already used "For example" in second paragraph.
producer and consumer --> producers and consumers
smartphones gains tremendous popularity --> gain

catalyzing the business --> I think "growing" is more suitable.

I am also an IELTS test taker like you, so I cannot give you your exact band score. However, I think your band score is about 6.5 or 7, due to these mistakes.

Nowadays, increasing number of people are highly influenced by advertisements which is also act as a major deciding factor in order to purchase an item in the market.

In that case, advertisements can help people to be aware of various brands available in market and enable them to distinguish their best suitable products in terms of quality and budget.

I think you have good writing skills.Hope you will get better score in writing.

Ok...then you need to work on that seriously :) First read the topic carefully and decide quickly what stand you take on the argument. Then quickly think of two reasons as to why you take that stand. Now we need to write the essay;

I suggest you to shorten your intro. Do only the needful in the first go (I'll talk about the second go lately :D )
For intro, do the background by rephrasing the title and make a clear statement of your opinion. (opinion- have some standard phrase ready to fit for every essay. e.g. In my view, I believe ?????) .... this saves time for your intro and now move on to the 1st body para. Start off it with writing your reason. Then write your example (if you don't get one quickly , leave that and go to the second para and write the second reason & the example) Now do the conclusion (for this too, you can have more or less one fit for all essays . For example- Due to the above reasons ???????)

Now you have more time to left. Go back to your previous parts. Write a hook in the intro. Then come to body paras and fill gaps (exmaples - can elaborate more)

First finish the skeletone form of your essay. This helps you handle time effectively :)
Don't worry too much about writing the best essay in the world. Make sure you have all necessary features in your essay. With practice and confidence, everything would automatically come. You write very well and you'll do fine at the exam. Practice your essays strictly following a structure :)

Hi Dumi,
I was wondering why you have not yet commented on my essay for two days though I could see your comments on others post :-)

Thanks a lot for your valuable idea to manage the time. Today unfortunately I couldn't write anything since I worked on listening module.
Tomorrow I will try to practice your idea and let you know. :-)
Really thanks to God from my heart for make me aware of this forum and people here who are helping others despite their busy work and family responsibilities.'

Thanks to you once again :-)

LOL ... I give my priority for unanswered threads and I saw you've got so many feedbacks :) Also, I personally think you don't need much help from us now because you are already very good. Anyways, I would always try to have some time for you as you have a great potential in getting a very good band at IELTS.


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