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Tv advertising is not good, agree or dis agree (IELTS)



asifulizlam 3 / 7  
Nov 15, 2013   #1
TV advertising is playing pivotal role in marketing sector. Many using this mode of marketing to advertise their products to target peoples. Television advertising is growing popular. Cause, it is convenient to transmit message to thousands of peoples through television channel. Though many people perceive that TV advertising is not good, but I prefer that it is much more effective way of conveying message to people.

Firstly, Through TV commercial a company who is going to market his product can easily grab attention of people. For example, in a recent survey made by Dhaka university says that, people seems that TV commercial is more useful and popular mode, rather than other advertising media. On that survey there were 2000 participants, among them around 1500 voted for television commercial. Now-a -days whether it is urban or rural life in every house there must have a television. So we conveniently assume that television advertising has good impact on us.

Secondly, Television advertises reduces the advertising expenses. For example, a company who promote his product through TV channel do not need any other mode of advertisement. Possibly it helps that company to reduce the advertisement cost subsequently. Generally, a company has to expend huge money to broadcast a 30 seconds video. But it easily draws attention of millions of people. There could be higher cost involved to grab attention of millions people if companies do not advertise through television.

In conclusion, Despite all contradiction I firmly agree that television advertisement makes the way easier to broadcast numerous product more easily and conveniently.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 16, 2013   #2
It's always good to include your prompt in the essay so that others can provide you with more relevant comments.

Cause,

.... this is wrong.... the right word is "Because"

Though many people perceive that TV advertising is not good,but I preferbelieve that it is a much more effective way of conveying message to people.

.... this is grammatically incorrect. You cannot have though and but both together;
Though many people perceive that TV advertising is not good, I believe it is a much more effective way of communicating to the masses.
Without seeing your prompt it is difficult to align your introduction with the prompt. However, I wish you pay attention to the structure I suggested to you in one of your previous essays.
phuoc 7 / 13  
Nov 17, 2013   #3
mode of marketing

marketing strategy

to target peoples

to a large number of viewers

Cause, it is convenient to transmit message to thousands of peoples through television channel

because ads can be quickly delivered to countrywide watchers

but I prefer that it is much more effective way of conveying message to people.

but I believe that it is an effective way of conveying the message in the ads

Despite all contradiction I firmly agree that television advertisement makes the way easier to broadcast numerous product more easily and conveniently.

despite opposing oppinions ... numerous products to viewers
OP asifulizlam 3 / 7  
Nov 18, 2013   #4
introduction with the prompt.

CAN YOU PLEASE ELABORATE.HOW I DEFINE PROMPT?
dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 19, 2013   #5
I don't what you mean. I asked only to include your topic with the essay for us to understand what it requires from you. :)

Firstly, Throughthrough TV commercial a company whothat is going to market his product can easily grab attention of people.

....this needs to be reorganized;
First, a company can grab the attention of masses through its TV commercials.

For example, in a recent survey made by Dhaka university says that, people seems that TV commercial is more useful and popular mode, rather than other advertising media.

For example, a recent study of Dhaka University found that TV commercials are the most popular media of advertising over all other types of media.

Secondly, Televisiontelevision advertisements reduceadvertises reduces the advertising expenses.

... You start with a capital letter and then use capital letters only for names.
OP asifulizlam 3 / 7  
Nov 19, 2013   #6
You start with a capital letter and then use capital letters only for names.

overall,How you evaluate my paragraph ? i am going to sit on ielts next month
dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 19, 2013   #7
:) Well I am not an examiner dear and therefore I do not know how to give you a score. If you want to have some idea about how they go about giving you scores, you can have a look at the following links. They may be helpful. However, my advice for you is to concentrate on writing more and more essays while reading others' essays written on similar topics. That would help you pick up points and also certain phrases. Do your best to prepare for the exam and be less worried about scores :D

ielts.org/PDF/UOBDs_WritingT2.pdf


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