you agree/disagree with ;'' it is better for children to grow up in the big city

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1.I am for the I dea...
I agree with the idea that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than a big city. There are several reasons why I think so.

Firstly, in the countryside, children are being lived in nature environment, with many kinds of trees or animals as well as fresh air with clean water.

Secondly, having been more safety, they are living in the places where fewer of cars and construction sites than in a big city are. In addition they would not be able to influence by complicated social evil such as, drug, drinking in bars or discos.

In sum, I think children should grow up in the countryside than in a big city. It is not only better for children's safety environment but it also provides the natural surrounding indeed. There for they always feel the live in peaceful.

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2.I am against the statement that
It is better for children grow up in the countryside than a big city, the effect of surrounded environment is very important with children. So that think Children are grown up in a big city they will have more conditions to develop themselves

Grown up in a big city since the day they are still a child, they can learn at the school with good teacher as well as their parents finance, to join the activities at school or community with their friends it make them develop the communication skill, Moreover to relax with convenience facilities as swimming-poor, libraries, or computers,,, whenever they get sick the good hospitals with professional doctors nearly. Not only that of these they can attend many kinds of big event as festival or concerts, fairs as well as with multiple options of fashion, commodities, To enjoy convenience transportation system.

In sum, Grown up in a big city is lived in a dynamic environment to approach advanced technology, convenience facilities and freedom of choose all kind of commodities as well as services,

I agree with the idea that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. ... Firstly, in the countryside, children are being livedliving in naturenatural environment, with many kinds of trees orand animals as well as fresh air withand clean water.

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city, the effectimpact (or influence) of the surrounded environment is very important withto children. So that thinkifc hildren are grownbrought up in a big city they will have more conditionsopportunities to develop themselves

Sorry that I have to split this into two parts, my internet access is not very stable.
Anyway, let's resume from here:


This seems to be a very ambitious sentence, but I am a little confused by the parents finance part. Do you mean:
Growing/Brought up in a big city, children can benefit from the good teaching facilities as long as their parents can afford it. Meanwhile, taking part in the activities either on or off campus can help kids develop their social abilities.? Or, do you mean --

Living in a big city, children can benefit from the good education resources as well as their parents benefit from the job opportunities.
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I am not sure whether you mean this or not:
Moreover, cities provide people more recreation facilities such as swimming-poor and theatres, and other high quality public facilities like libraries and hospitals. More importantly, convenient transport system enjoyed by urban citizens provides them chances to go to the countryside whenever they want.


In sum, growing up in a big city means life with dynamic environment, advanced technology, convenient facilities and freedom to enjoy various commodities as well as services.

Since you mentioned advanced technology in the last paragraph, I think it will be much better if you make a little development on this part. Give some examples about advanced technology.

Thank you:)

thank you so much VIVIEN_WANG, Thanks for spending time to help me edited my first essay.

In addition they would not be affected by complicated social evils, such as drugs, drinking in bars, or discos.---- Ha ha, I am not certain that discos are evil. Weird, maybe, but not evil.

:-)

In sum, I think children should grow up in the countryside rather than in a big city.

It is better for children grow up in the countryside than a big city. The effect of the surrounding environment is very important with children. So that think children are grown up in a big city they will have more conditions to develop themselves---? I am not sure what you eant o say, but it seems that Wei helped to figure it out!!! :-)