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Agree - Disagree Topic Government



Phuongle123 1 / -  
Sep 4, 2024   #1
Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree?

It is widely argued that the government should impose a limitation on multinational corporations in terms of establishing offices and plants to provide local companies with the protection. From my perspective, I firmly disagree with given statement, as foreign fundings can bring several benefits, including a decrease in the unemployment rate and the development of a skilled workforce.

Firstly, global companies play crucial roles in increasing the employment rate for the countries that they invest in. To be more specific, they frequently offer a wide range of job openings each year, with higher salaries and better benefits in kind compared to domestic enterprises. For example, several multinational companies in Viet Nam, such as Nike, Sam Sung, hire thousands of workers and officers each year, helping to decrease the numbers of unemployment. As a result, employees no longer face with a lack of job opportunities..

Another benefit is that working for foreign companies assists workers in developing their skills. This means that they have a chance to cope with new methods, and the advances in technology, which are not available in their home countries. Normally, when employees enter factories, they will be trained on how to run the automatic machines, the regulations in the workplace, and the ability to understand some foreign languages. Thanks to these instructions, workers can acquire new knowledge in the development of technology in order to improve their productivity and performance.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly disagree with the view that some nations should limit foreign investment in building offices and factories in their countries to protect domestic companies. This is because these foreign companies may annually offer more job opportunities and enhance the quality of workers.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Sep 4, 2024   #2
I firmly disagree

While you did respond to the question being asked, you did so using the incorrect format. This will result in point deductions in your TA score.

This is not an extent response essay. Therefore, the measured response you provided should not have been used. The correct response would have a simple disagreement with the statement. No exaggeration required.

Sam Sung,

Incorrect spelling for Samsung. Points will be deducted from the LR score.

for the reasons mentioned above,

You actually need to repeat the basic reasons mentioned in the summary conclusion. Since you mention these reasons later on in the paragraph, there is no need to indicate this early on in the paragraph.

strongly disagree

Do not use the extent format response in the concluding summary. More point deductions to the TA score will be applied.


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