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Allowing children to use phones at the school



Rahma20 1 / -  
Jan 15, 2024   #1
Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While some people urge to ban of phones during the school day, others encourage children to use their phones instead. I believe that despite the benefits of allowing students to use phones at school, prohibiting the use of phones is the most effective approach.

There are reasons why not permitting children to use their phones during their school day is a positive action. First, phones usually distract students' concentration as they tend to check their phones every time a notification pops up when they are in the middle of studying. Second, there is no guarantee that phones are secured from getting stolen or lost as they are in the hands of children. Lastly, with the presence of phones, students' interaction at school will be deteriorated since they are carried away with what they see on screens.

However, the allowance of using phone for children at school delivers some advantages. Firstly, it is evident that internet plays an enormous role in education makes it inevitable for students to access the internet with their phones which leads to receiving broader knowledge. Other than that, phones can be used for children to contact their parents when their children need them. For example, children often ask their parents to fetch a book that is left at home and to call them to pick up from school. These instances only happen if children are allowed to use phones at school.

To sum up, there are factors why many people demand forbidding phones for children while others support it. In my opinion, there are many alternatives that can substitute phones usage at the school day, meaning that phones are not pivotal devices amid learning process, and children should be forbidden from using them.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Jan 20, 2024   #2
Well, the discussion approach could be better. For these types of comparison essays, the examiner gives extra points for your point of view of each public opinion. When you are asked to give your opinion, it is best to analyze the position of the public in relation to your understanding of why such reasons are valid or not. You do not need to have a stand alone paragraph, nor do you need to write the essay from a personal point of view alone. You have to merge the public and personal opinions per paragraph so that the examiner will see how well you analytical writing skills are and if you can quickly opinionate within 5 sentences.


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