The amount of people who took train at London Underground Station in a day for sixteen hours

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - UNDERGROUND STATION PASSENGER NUMBERS IN LONDON

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

This graph illustrates the amount of people take train at London Underground Station in a day for sixteen hours (6 am - 10 pm).

Overall, people generally take train at the station starts from 6 am until 10 pm. The train has the most amount of passengers at 8 and 18 o'clock. The number of passengers reaches its lowest point at 6 am and 4 pm.

At 8 o'clock, the amount of passengers is exactly 400. Following to 18 o'clock, there is a slight decrease in the number of passengers which is just under 400. Meanwhile, in the afternoon at 12 am, 13 pm and 14 pm, the number of passengers does not change much and increases slightly (from above 250 people to 300 people)

At 6 am and 4 pm, people are less likely taking train to go to places. There are just 100 passengers at those two hours. After reaches its lowest point, the number of passengers gradually increases in the two hours (200 people and at/less than 400 people)

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The writer is trying to over extend the analysis into a 4 paragraph presentation when the provided image is good only for 3 paragraphs. The essay, due to the forced lengthening is leaning more towards under- analysis since there are only 2 sentences per paragraph rather than the better analyzed 3-5 sentence presentation. A 4 paragraph presentation works best when more than 2 images are analyzed and reported on.

There is an overuse of parenthesis in the presentation. Using it once in a presentation is enough. Try to use other punctuation macks and be more analytical in the data presentation instead. Compare and contrast the data for maximum effect.

i think u should use more comlplex sentences instead of simple sentences. Also u can try to use some passive voice in your essay

I can spot some grammar errors in your essay as below for your review:

Overall, people generally take trains at the station starting from ...

After reaching its lowest point, the number of ...