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I will give you the alternative sentences. You can learn it so that your writing does not seem rigid.
The chart shows the vehicles used by visitors during travel in New Zealand INTERNATIONAL TOURISTS HAVE A TENDENCY TO DRIVE THE CAR WHEN THEY CONDUCT A TRIP TO NEW ZEALAND, REPRESENTING AT APPROXIMATELY 70% OF TOTAL. The most popular transport is using car which the percentage is almost 70 percent. MEANWHILE, Plane and coach are the next favourite vehicles which have nearly THE SAME POSITION LESS THAN A HALF AS MUCH .
... 20 percent and least of all is using THE boat, with the percentage is 5 percent.
Note: You have to have the bravery to compare amongst the figures if you wanna reach the higher score.
The percentage of holidaymakers using train is 20 ...
Train has lower percentage than coach but higher than boat, at 20 per cent while boat is the least with less than 10 per cent of visitors.
I think you should compare the bar graph not only explain the percentage but also explain the order, which one the highest or the least and which one lower or higher.
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