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Task 1 IELTS : International Visitors to New Zealand :Transport Used During visit


Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
The bar chart gives information about the common transport which visitors use when they visit New Zealand. Overall, most of visitors are use public transport to go around when they visit New Zealand.

Looking at the details, car becomes the most familiar transport with more than 60 per cent of people use it. There are two vehicles which has almost the same number to be operated by holiday makers, plane and coach. The third most popular transport is train, at 20 per cent. And the boat becomes the least transport which visitor makers bring to bear, less than 10 per cent.

The highest percentage to be operated during visit is car. As a transportation which visitors use plane outnumbering coach by one per cent but both of the vehicles has percentage more tha 30 per cent. Train has a lower percentage than coach. It makes boat becomes the least percentage of all vehicles.

kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Hello farida, It's nice to know you here. I like your essay.

2nd paragraph.
There are two vehicles which hashave almost the same number ...

thank you very much
Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Aug 14, 2016   #3
hii ida, generally you have good writting. Here some comment from me to enhance yours.
more tha than 30 per cent
The third most popular you can you the other word for popular like august or renowed because this word is too coommon to use transport is train


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