First, besides the good body shape, sports
have very vital effects in(on?) human's healthfulness.
are crucial to a healthy lifestyle. In my viewpoint, our body and moral health depend to physical activities directly. As a case in point, last month I had
very difficult exam that I forced to study for one week back to back. After that exam, I felt depressed and exhausted. Therefore
Then, I decided to go to the
gym to recuperate and it responded very well!
As a result,
Therefore, sports are necessary for students to acquire their energy and health.
- You may avoid the phrase "besides + N-phrase" by using the followings: "in addition to" or "apart from"
- An IELTS examiner living in UK told me that we should not use the word "Moreover" as it is old-fashioned. Furthermore or In addition are good substitutions.
Hope this helps.