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Angela Lee Duckworth found a way to be a better person and shared her experience


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 13, 2016   #1
TED Summary : Grit : the power of passion and perseverance | Angela Lee Duckworth

The most demanding job in Angela period was teaching the children in the school. When Angela taught 7 grade a mathematic in New York City Public School, she made quiz, test, homework and assingment every day. She found that iq was not only different between the best and worst student. Some of the strongest performance student did not have better iq score than others. She believed that one of her student could learn the material of study. If they focus on study a subject, they can reach their dream. After taught 7 years in school, she got that what we needed in education which was understanding well between student and learning the subject. Moreover, She left the school and started to be psychologist. She found many information about kids and adults from all any kinds of superchallenging settings. After that, she and her team asked about several question related to ability of people from kids and adults. In conclusion, she discovered grit was the answer of the problem. Grit was about the passion and perseverance to be better person.

Holt - / 7,527 2001  
Nov 13, 2016   #2
Andika, while I will give you an allowance for misspelling words due to the fact that you were writing under time constraint, please be reminded that word misspellings in an actual test will result in a lower score as points will be deducted accordingly in the final band score. I am unclear as to who Angela is because your sentence development was unclear. I am not sure what you mean by "Angela period". I know that Angela is the topic of the article, but how did she become a period in school? Since that would have been your topic sentence in an actual test format, you will have immediately failed the test as you did not properly represent the topic sentence from the original source. Since you would not have scored well due to the problem with the topic sentence and the spelling mistakes, I would like to give you a chance to repeat this essay. This time, pay attention to your spelling and properly develop your topic sentence in order to gain a better score. I know you can do it. You just need to concentrate this time around.
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 16, 2016   #3
hai dika
I think it is a good summary
I have advice for you
hope it works

The most demanding job in Angela period was teaching ...

When Angela was taught 7 grade (...), she made the quiz, test, homework and assingmentassignment every day.

She found that iqit was not only (...) and the worst student.

... not have better iqIQ score than others.

... one of her students could learn ...

If they focus on the study a subject, ...

After taughtstudied 7 years in school, ...

... and started to be a psychologist. She found manymuch information <<< uncountable word

about kidschildren and adults from all any kinds of superchallengingsuper challenging settings.

After that, she and her team asked about several questions related to the ability of people ...

... grit was the answer ofin the problem.
... perseverance to be a better person.

thanks


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