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Writing task 2: Argument essay (Food and Diet)



Nhu ngo 1 / 1  
Aug 11, 2020   #1
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Everyone should become vegetarians because they do not have to eat meat to have a good health.


To what extent you agree or disagree

In this day and age, it is argued that everyone had better be in a vegetarian diet which is without meat to keep their health in good condition. While I agree that people should become vegetarians , I believe that meat is necessary for our meals.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why people ought to become vegetarians. First, a vegetarian diet might be high in healthy nutrients, such as vitamins, fibers and minerals, which could be beneficial for the immune system. For instance, being in a vegetarian diet encourages people to eat more vegetables which are helpful to build up their immunity and avoid diseases. Second, because of not eating meat, many people could easily lose their weight by following a low calories diet. For example, people who are overweight would quickly get slimmer body and flatter their physical appearances by these diets.

On the other hand, I believe that the diet which there is no meat could bring lots of harmfulness to our health . First, since there might be not enough nutrients for the metabolism of the body, that lack could cause a lot of digestive troubles. In fact, vegetarians who do not eat meat would be easily suffering from the needy of proteins, which harm to the muscle system. Second, due to not eating meat, many people are not likely to provide adequate energy for their daily routines. This means that if people have a diet without meat, they would not study or work effectively.

In conclusion, while having a vegetarian diet could bring a lot of benefits for our health, I believe that meat would be extremely essential for the diet.

cookie115 1 / 2  
Aug 11, 2020   #2
all of the points that i mention below are just my two cents anyway. if something is wrong, please correct me.
... could do a lot of harm to our health.
muscle system-> muscular system

You can use these collocations alternatively:

keep their health in good condition -> keep them in the pink of health
... meat is necessary for our meals-> for our daily portions
many people could easily lose their weight by ... -> shed a few pounds
that lack could cause ... -> that deficit

Hope that you will accomplish what you are aiming for
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15467  
Aug 12, 2020   #3
Try to avoid often used, but irrelevant phrases such as "In this day and age". It is considered part of the memorized phrases that ESL students use. Do not imply an argument when the original prompt refers to a mere suggestion.The proper reference to the original topic is "A suggestion has been made that..." The point of view required for the essay is definite. Either there is a strong support in agreement, or a strong support in disagreement. It is the emotional descriptive word prior to the dis/agreement that is looked upon when scoring based upon a clearly presented opinion. When you say you agree with both, that means, you do not have an opinion that can support a singular point of view, which is the whole basis for the discussion. You cannot use a comparative discussion in the singular opinion essay. That is why you are asked a specific question, covering only 2 choices for the response. As far as your conclusion is concerned, there is an incomplete presentation as it only represents your point of view. It lacks your original topic reference and reasoning sentence presentations.
OP Nhu ngo 1 / 1  
Aug 12, 2020   #4
@Holt so I have to write this essay in one-sided view, right?


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