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'Athletes and sports professionals deserve it' - essay


arminima 1 / 5  
Aug 31, 2012   #1
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

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Some people have this idea that sports professionals have more salaries than people in other improtant profession. In my opinion, it is not completly true and even if they earn more money, it is fair for them.

Most of sports, need a special talent for who wants to play that and whithout this, it is not possible to be successful on that field. For example, playing basketball is require a long height and more tall is more successful. Althoug we couldn't ignore the effect of practice in their achivement, but if someone does not have a kind of talent, he is hardly can be a professional there.

As is said, pracitcing hard is the most important resons for their success. If we look at an olympic games, we can see there is not too many athelest in there. For being one of this super proffesionals, one person must practice for many years. Also the chance of entering to an high level team is low.

One of the main reason that sports players are popular and give enourmus money is that society loves them and their jobs. Millions of people all over the world going to stadums for wathichg football or tennis games. It gives the investigators and management a good profit and they able to pay a huge money to players.

On the other hands, it is not good that other important professions can't earn as enough money as a sport player does. They studied in schools and universities for many years and they sould have suitable salaries. In a commonist society, all people must have the same facilities and no one can be very wealth. It helps all the people to live without poverty.

In conclusion, although athelists and sprots fessionals earn more money than other proffesions, but they deserve it because it's very hard for them to get to this levels and also it needs a special tallent and there is not many people like them.
ace 5 / 66 5  
Sep 1, 2012   #2
In conclusion, although athelists and sprots fessionals earn more money than other proffesions,

You need to enable spell checker because many of your sentences, like the one below, have simple spelling errors.
OP arminima 1 / 5  
Sep 1, 2012   #3
Thanks for your comment
Emir101 1 / 2  
Sep 1, 2012   #4
As is said

You should try to remove some words that don't need to be there to make it clean,simple and straightforward. Also, be careful of your usage between singular and plural words because you tend to mix up the two.
OP arminima 1 / 5  
Nov 23, 2012   #5
Thanks to all friends
MariettaA 2 / 12  
Nov 23, 2012   #6
Some people have this idea that sport professionals have more salaries than other degree level professions. In my opinion, it is not completely true and even if they earn more money, it is fair for them.

Most sports require an athlete to withhold a special talent to contribute to the field, court, track, or pool. For these talented individuals wanting to play comes with hard work, practice, and determination and without this, it is not possible to be successful on that field. For example, playing basketball requires these individuals to reach a certain height requirement and with this height they are also expected to be able to show proper ball handling skills, defensive aid, fine shots and a proper drive to the basket to reach complementary success. Although we couldn't ignore the effect of practice in their achievement, but if someone does not have a kind of talent, they would not be capable of reaching that next level of success.

As was said, practicing hard is the most important reasons for their success. If we look at the Olympic Games, we can see there are not too many athletes there. For being one of these super professionals, one person must practice for many years. Also the chance of entering to a high level team is low.

One of the main reasons that sports players are popular and receive enormous pay is that society loves them and their jobs. Millions of people all over the world go to stadiums to watch various sporting events like football, soccer, and/or tennis games. It gives the investigators and management a good profit and they <<are>>able to pay huge money to players.

On the other hand, it is not good that other important professions can't earn sufficient pay as a sport player does. They studied in schools and universities for many years and they should have suitable salaries. In a communist society, all people must have the same facilities and no one can be very wealthy. It helps all the people to live without poverty.

In conclusion, although athletes and sports sensational events earn more money than other professions, I believe that athletes deserve it because it's very hard for them to get to this level and also it needs a special talent and there are not many people like them.

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OP arminima 1 / 5  
Nov 23, 2012   #7
Thanks dude
MariettaA 2 / 12  
Nov 24, 2012   #8
SMH... Lol I am not a dude, just a girl that knows and play sports. But your welcome...
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Nov 25, 2012   #9
Hai Arminima..

lots of spelling mistakes are there in your essay...

:1st para you told without talent no professionals...means most important is talent...?
But second para you wrote hard work is the most important...
So make sure what you are writting...

: Commonist society...?

Practice harder...
Concentrate little bit more on spellings...

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OP arminima 1 / 5  
Nov 25, 2012   #10
So than you honey ;-)
OP arminima 1 / 5  
Nov 25, 2012   #11
joythblessy
got you. thanks boddy


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