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Aziz Abu Sarah, a tourism entrepreneur and peace builder from Palestine - report



rosadesiana 38 / 38  
Oct 6, 2016   #1
SUMMARRY 9 - FOR MORE TOLERANCE WE NEED MORE ........ TOURISM ?

Aziz Abu Sarah, a tourism entrepreneur and peace builder from Palestine talked about how a journey able to deliver a great impact to the peace around the globe. He believes that a travel done by tourists which leave their native country and come to a novel country that they never visit before and discover what is happening in that country, connect with people, make a relationship with the native citizen and uncover everything that cannot be read on books or cannot be found on google. This is a right mode to develop the connections within humankind in the earth. Imagine if every people have a chance to do traveling and connecting with people in the city, build a brotherhood through the different cultures, behaviors, languages and perceptions. Imagine how the community in this world will be united. This method is a perfect way, to travel, create a sustainable tourism and a sustainable way of connecting and friendship in diversity. If we can embody this long-term project to make a better life, then a case which occurred to my brother when he was 18 would never happen to other's life anymore. My brother was arrested after been suspected as the a doer who throw the stone, then he was beaten up because he did not want to admit that it was him. At the time he left the prison he was weak and passed away because of the injuries he suffered. I dedicate my self to conduct a sustainable tourism which hopefully will lead to the peace condition in the long run in the world.

Afdhel 14 / 19  
Oct 6, 2016   #2
Hi, there. I want to give some suggestions.

... connections within humankindin the earth ( This is a right mode to develop the connections within humankind in the world)

He believes that a travel is done by tourists. No verbs.

Good luck


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