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A ban on dangerous sports or freedom to do any sports or activity



gintoki7 5 / 9  
Aug 21, 2021   #1
Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.



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It is usually suggested that risky sports be banned by governments . From my point of view, I completely oppose to this notion and believe that people should be free ti enjoy any sports or activities under safety condition.

To begin with, a ban on extreme sports may do more harm than good for the following reasons. Firstly, if a sport was banned, it would probably become more fascinating to adventurous people or curious teenagers. As the ban is likely to act as an official confirmation that the sport is risky, which would probably trigger people's desire to conquer it. Moreover, a rise in the number of dangerous sports enthusiasts would create a high demand for the required equipment. However, a ban on those sports means that people have to purchase them from the black markets, where sellers usually sell low-quality products, enhancing the risk of the sports.

Based on the aforementioned argument, it is advisable for governments to let people go in for any sports or activities. Provided that safety is guaranteed, taking part in extreme sports could even make people happier thanks to the adrenaline released during the process.In addition, those activities even help people to challenge themselves and boost their confidence. For these reasons, instead of banning risky sports or activities, government should enforce policies to protect people's safety during the activities.

In conclusion, I completely disagree with governments banning extreme sports and insist that everyone has the right to participate in any sports or activities under safety condition.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Aug 31, 2021   #2
I beg the writer to stop with his practice essays. He is incapable of properly responding to the task requirement. He is constalty writing an agree or disagree response for a discuss both points of view and offer an opinion presentation. Those are 2 different types of essays. I am repeatedly pointing this out, but the lessons are falling on deaf ears. The best thing that this writer can do is postpone his IELTS test if he has one scheduled already, and then enroll in formal IELTS classes to help him learn how to respond to the questions. Actually, he does not even have to enroll in lessons, provided he reviews the sample essays that are freely available at this forum. He can easily learn the proper and improper way to respond to the essays just by reading the worth of others, paying attention to the corrections, and applying it to his own work. I am not confident of his ability to pass the IELTS test at this point. He will definitely have a problem passing the essay portions.
OP gintoki7 5 / 9  
Sep 5, 2021   #3
@Holt
hello, i really appreciate your comments and one thing i want to explain is that all of the essays you read were posted in the same time when there were no response so i just posted all of them and waited for comments


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