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IELTS: Should we ban all forms of advertising?



betsy1122 1 / 2  
May 16, 2011   #1
The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the increasing competition among a medley of different advertisements, some advertising companies even use exaggerated or deceptive information to boost sales. It seems right to prohibit advertisements; however, a majority of them still serve the public in a useful aspect.

For the sake of getting a good result of marketing and competing with their counterparts, some advertisers exaggerate the effect of products. As a result of it, consumers who bought the goods due to the advert cannot benefit from it. Even worse, some of the advertisements have bad influence on the people who bought it. Plenty of evidence can be found in our daily lives, for example, a large amount of customers suffered from serious diseases, such as stroke or asthma, due to the deceptive advertisement of fake diet pills. Therefore, it is reasonable to ban this form of advertising.

On the other hand, not all types of advert give us useless information. Advertisements refer to a media strategy to enhance selling and a large proportion of them are serviceable oriented. They tell us the features of products, according which we could make decision to purchase desirable products. Meanwhile, abundant information from advertisements makes shipping much more efficient. This may include specialty, purchase channel or even price etc.

Based on all the understanding above, advertisements play a pivotal role in our daily lives. So the key is, I believe, to set regulations and censor advert strictly so that to prohibit deceptive advertisements.

thank you for your time and suggestions.

Neeta 5 / 21  
May 16, 2011   #2
Dear Betsy,

The essay topic no doubt asking to present both end views but I feel if you pose a question in introduction, it will be even better. for example "The question is whether imposing ban on all form of advertisement will serve its purpose to society?"

Take Care

Neeta
heena33 4 / 18  
May 17, 2011   #3
SEE if ur company of cosmetics or lets take a soap company won,t u advertise it for ur profit so i think it should not be banned .

Actually some of children enjoy seeind advertisment.
OP betsy1122 1 / 2  
May 17, 2011   #4
thank you for all suggestions!

could you plz help me about grammar mistakes?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
May 17, 2011   #5
...to prohibit advertisements; however, a majority of them still serve the public in a useful aspect. (Right here, at the end of the first paragraph, add a sentence that sums up your main idea for the whole essay.)------do you know what I mean? Add a short sentence to the end of that first paragraph. Make the reader understand your main idea.

As a result, consumers who bought...

plural:... the goods due to the advert cannot benefit from them.

This is very good! Your English is nearly perfect. :-)
OP betsy1122 1 / 2  
May 17, 2011   #6
Tnank you for you encouragement, kevin.

however, a majority of them still serve the public in a useful aspect. I believe it is not apporiate to ban all forms of advertisements.

this could be better, is it? :)

Is there any grammar mistake? i'm not good at it and i need band 7 on writing.

thanks again
Neeta 5 / 21  
May 18, 2011   #7
Betsy, I felt there is no room for correction when I read your essay.

I read online that hidden argument essay topic usually ask for "to what extend", "in what way", or "how has something change" and you must reveal hidden question. For example from "to what extend something affects" TO "does/whether something affect"

FROM "in what way globalization affects young generation..." TO "does/whether globalization affects young generation...."

FROM "how does something...." TO "does/whether something..."

Hope I'm making sense :(

Take Care

Neeta


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