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The bar chart shows the proportion of British people who give money to charity in five age groups



lynrd 1 / -  
Aug 8, 2021   #1
Writing Task 1:

the percentage of British people giving money to charity



The bar chart shows the proportion of British people who give money to charity in five age groups in 1990 and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of people between 36 and 50 giving money to charity is the highest. The percentage of people donating money in 1990 was greater than in 2010. It is also noticeable that the most difference in the proportion of people donating money in two years is in a group of people from 18 to 25.

In 1990, more than 40% of British people between 36 and 50 gave money to charity, it is the highest proportion in the chart, while the least proportion was in a group of people from 18 to 25. In 2010, these figures of both groups decreased to 35% and 14%, respectively. Besides, the percentage of donating of people in the 26-35 age group declined from 32% to 24%.

In 1990, 35% and 32% of people giving money to charity were in the 51-65 and the over 65 age group, respectively. These figures of both groups increased to 39% and 35% in 2010.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Aug 9, 2021   #2
The writer wrote the report based on active timeline presentation. This means the activities are ongoing. However, the image represents previously completed contribution schedules.The essay will fail on G R A mistakes alone. The writer must become familiar with tense usage if he is to improve his GRA score. Additionally the writer shows a limited sentence structure range. Consider not writing run-on sentences next time. Use individual sentences for data presentation instead. It helps with the C + C score. Also, vary the presentation by using other punctuation marks to show an advanced writing skill.

The writer understands what the image is about and what data should be presented. However, his limited writing skills fail to show a passing potential.


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