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IELTS task 1 - bar and pie charts (the results of a survey of adult education)



leeminh 5 / 17  
Apr 11, 2012   #1
Hi, everyone
I'm new in this forum and I have some problems when i try to write essay. Please fix it for me. Thanks a lot !!

The bar chart illustrates main seven reasons that people make decisions for their studying and pie graph demonstrates the percentages of adult groups think who should pay the education cost for them.

According to first chart, having interest in subject and wanting to raise knowledge on their field are the two most popular reasons for people making their decisions with 40% and 38%. There are 3 reasons in middle group including helping for their jobs, getting promotion and enjoying on learning stay around 20%. The last reason group has the lowest rate that people in it just want to have new jobs and go studying to meet the others stay at 12% and 9%.

In the latter chart, the survey gives out three targets which will pay the cost of education. 40% of people who are asked tick on the individual blank while others think that taxpayer and employer share in turn 25% and 35%



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ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
Apr 11, 2012   #2
The firs and the most important step for writing a chart (Task one of IELTS writing) is the true organization. In the introduction you should write about what the figures show, as well as the place and time(where and when). At the end of the introduction you should inform a reader the general trend (you can start with: " in general.. "). in this part of introduction you should just mention the increasing or decreasing trend.

The second part is body. It is too important to compare results and use an appropriate time (past of present tens, for instance). In addition, finding a link between figures is another imperative issue.

The final part is a conclusion which represents what is the main idea of the data.

I hope these hints be helpful
Best regards
OP leeminh 5 / 17  
Apr 11, 2012   #3
thank for your comment but in these charts I cannot find out the time as well as locations of the survey, so I chose present tense. I will try another one which has true organization. Thanks so much
xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 11, 2012   #4
Hi there,

I recommend you go for following two books:

IELTS Trainer (Authors: Hashemi and Thomas)

Collins English for Exam - Writing for IELTS

The first one provides you very detail steps how you make your Task 1 perfectly. I like this one. Collins is ok, lots of practice, this book covers 12 topic in different areas such as: gender role, health, education, language, environment, biodiversity etc.

Cheers
xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 14, 2012   #5
Hi Leeminh,

writing a mix charts, you have check out any relationship between them, if not, a simple one could add on to your introduction. And your second paragraph will mainly talk about the complicate one. it is suggested that you have to write a simple conclusion.

Cheers


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