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TOEFL: it has become an issue of whether advertisements make products seem more appealing or not.



Lavender0723 1 / -  
Jul 29, 2020   #1
Any feedback would be appreciated!

Topic:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.


Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
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In contemporary society, it has become an issue of whether advertisements make products seem more appealing or not. People's opinions vary from person to person. Some claim that we will assume that products are better than they are if they are advertised. Others hold the opposite viewpoint. In my opinion, I would prefer that advertisements mislead us into believing that the products are better than they are for a couple of reasons.

Firstly, advertisements always show the best sides of the product, it is difficult for us to find its flaws unless we use it. It reminds me of an example that matches my idea to the fullest extent. I bought a dishwasher which is the most expensive one in the store. I bought it because the advertisement claimed that it could remove all the dirt from dishes and it also could save time because we didn't need to spend time washing dishes. It turned out that the advertisement was right, nonetheless, it wasted lots of water and electricity, I saved my time but lost money to pay the water bill and electricity bill.

Additionally, advertisements may persuade us to think that we need a useless product. To illustrate my point, the experience of buying an electronic toothbrush can be cited as an example. I bought the electronic toothbrush because an advertisement said that all of us should have an electronic toothbrush because it can clean out all the dirty things in our teeth, even something that is stuck in our teeth. However, after I used it, it didn't perform as perfectly as the advertisement said. What's worse is that a traditional toothbrush outperforms it. That is to say that I didn't need an electronic one, I just needed a traditional one.

In conclusion, I believe that advertisements convince us that products are better than they are. This is because advertisements always show the best sides of the product and because advertisements make us think that we need the product.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Jul 30, 2020   #2
Your reasoning paragraph and closing statement are good. However, in the opening statement, you actually said that you prefer to have advertisements misled the buyer, which is a totally wrong interpretation of the prompt. You could have said something similar to this instead:

It is often said that advertising is made to help sell a product. Each product promotion is aimed at making the item look like it is the ultimate in function, hence our need to own it. However, once a person owns the item, reality sets in and he realizes the product isn't as good as it was made out to be. I support this belief because of my personal experiences with various "as advertised" products.

Like I said, the reasons are accurate, so the discussion is strong. It is the introduction that proved to be the weak point of your presentation.


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