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"Big Families May Be The Best Way to Avoid Divorce"


David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
Happy family is one of people's desire, especially for people who are getting marriage and have a big family. But it is not easy as we know. Sometimes people can not keep their marital status and finally their getting divorce in the end of time. There are various factors that cause a divorce, such as socioeconomic status and age at marriage. In the latest research presented by the American Sociological Association, There are many factors that play into divorce, scientists from Ohio State found that the more siblings you have, the lower you risk of getting divorced as an adult. On the other hand, researched by Doug Downey, a professor of sociology at The Ohio State University, saids growing up in a family with siblings, we will develop a set of skills for negotiating both negative and positive interaction, consider other people's points of view and learn solve problems. In conclusion, more siblings have positive impact for successful marriages.

ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
The following are several takes on your essay:

- Having a happy family is one of people's desire, especially for peoplethose who are getting marriagemarried and have a big family.
- ButHowever, it is not easy as we knowthat simple to achieve that .
- Sometimes,(a comma is needed) people can not keep their ...
- In the latest research presented by the American Sociological Association, Tt here are many factors that play into divorce,.
- On the other hand, researched by Doug Downey, (...), saidsthat growing up in a family with siblings, we will develop a set (...) and positive interaction,; considering other people's points of ...

Hope these help.
Iedha01 21 / 40  
Sep 13, 2016   #3
Hi,
I love your essay topic, it is one of the hottest issue nowadays. Actually your essay is clear enough. I can get your point.
However, on my point of view, you should use more uncommon words in your later essay.
For example in line 8 and 9
There are many factors that play into divorce,....
Many aspects also simulate the breakup of someone's relationship....
PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 13, 2016   #4
Hello David, I have some inputs to your essay

Pay attention in pararel clause, especially for people who are getting marriage and have having a big family.

... There are many factors that play into divorce,(put dot be better) scientists from Ohio State ...

a professor of sociology at The Ohio State University, saids said growing ...

siblings, (need connector) we will develop a set of skills for ...

be careful in your connector and grammar.

hope this help
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 13, 2016   #5
having Happy family is (...), especially for peoplethose who are getting marriagehave married and have a big family. Buthowever , it is not easy as we know.

... and finally their getting divorce inat the end of time .
..., such as socioeconomic status and age atof marriage.
...There are many factors that play intotrigger divorce, scientists ...
On the other hand, a researched by Doug Downey, (...), saids growing up in a family with siblings, we will develop a set ...

you need to concern on your sentence structure, in the beginning you tend to compose simple sentences but made the complex ones which are less accurate at the end.


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