Happy family is one of people's desire, especially for people who are getting marriage and have a big family. But it is not easy as we know. Sometimes people can not keep their marital status and finally their getting divorce in the end of time. There are various factors that cause a divorce, such as socioeconomic status and age at marriage. In the latest research presented by the American Sociological Association, There are many factors that play into divorce, scientists from Ohio State found that the more siblings you have, the lower you risk of getting divorced as an adult. On the other hand, researched by Doug Downey, a professor of sociology at The Ohio State University, saids growing up in a family with siblings, we will develop a set of skills for negotiating both negative and positive interaction, consider other people's points of view and learn solve problems. In conclusion, more siblings have positive impact for successful marriages.
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Hope these help.
Hi,
I love your essay topic, it is one of the hottest issue nowadays. Actually your essay is clear enough. I can get your point.
However, on my point of view, you should use more uncommon words in your later essay.
For example in line 8 and 9
There are many factors that play into divorce,....
Many aspects also simulate the breakup of someone's relationship....
Hello David, I have some inputs to your essay
Pay attention in pararel clause, especially for people who are getting marriage and have having a big family.
... There are many factors that play into divorce,(put dot be better) scientists from Ohio State ...
a professor of sociology at The Ohio State University, saids said growing ...
siblings, (need connector) we will develop a set of skills for ...
be careful in your connector and grammar.
hope this help
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you need to concern on your sentence structure, in the beginning you tend to compose simple sentences but made the complex ones which are less accurate at the end.
