The birth, death and the population growths of Scotland in 1940 with projection towards 2020

demographic trends in Scotland

The line graph presents the birth, death and the population growths of Scotland in 1940 with projection towards 2020. The most prominent feature was that the country's population was on the steady decline since 1955 and stopped growing all together by around the mid 2000s.

The birth rate of Scotland dropped from 2.5% in 1940 and never returned to that mark ever since. Except for two brief periods of very modest recovery (1945-1950, 1965-1968), The country's birth rate plunged to roughly 1% in 1960. Since the 70s, the birth rate of Scotland was on a continuing downward trend to well below 1% around the 2010s. The trend is forecast to remain unchanged towards 2020.

The death rate of Scotland declined from 1.5% in 1940 and leveled off at approximately 0.5% since 1955. In 2010, this feature witnesses a slow increase and is expected to follow an upward trend toward the end of the period.

The figure for population growth of Scotland reached it's peak at 1.5% in 1955 after undergoing a notable drop to 0.5% in 1945. Since then, the proportion fell significantly over many next decades until hitting a trough and stopped growing by around the mid 2000s.

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The most prominent feature was is that the country's population was on the steady decline steadily declined since 1955, and then it stopped growing all together by around the mid 2000s.

@Thaophuoc
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I find that the structure of utterances on the analysis portion of the essay need a more stronghold approach. Take, for instance, the second paragraph's initial sentences. You had approached the writing with a lack of decent structure and organization. Try to utilize less of the parenthesis. I would also recommend trying to prioritize the information that you put out. Notice how messy it was when you had just simply placed midway in the paragraph the term "since the 70s" when you were previously following a time pattern.

Try your best to stick with fundamental or simplified structures for your sentences as well. Doing this will make a clearer content for your writing.

@Thaophuoc
Hi there.
Besides describing the three lines separately in 3 paragraphs, you can also make comparison between the lines.
For example, the birth rate and the population growth rate both show a similar downward trend.