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"A bizarre charm" - An essay on my most promising bad fortune.



mikemorpheus 1 / 1  
Sep 6, 2009   #1
Hello people, I need help regarding an essay that describes my ill-fate in a funny way. I put-forth first 3 paragraphs of my essay. Help me with the vocabulary.

A bizarre charm

I know from where should I kick start to explain the most promising bad fortune of mine. Any event in which my hand is involved will go haywire with a high probability. Generally one confers with such a situation rarely. But with me, they take place every now and then. Though they don't turn out to be catastrophic, more often than not they happen in my life. "When something bad happens, good follows" an adage that ignites up the spark of hope in the disheartened. Well, in my case it's always the bad. I'm not being antagonist or downhearted. I have nothing but to laugh at such situations. The worst part is that such situations calm down whenever I am nowhere in the neck of the woods. My promising bad fortune has always been a topic of discussion among my friends. Some say that it's my charm [;)][:D].

My first such situation as per my memory is when I encountered a 2- year old little girl who lives nearby. I generally don't get along with kids. But she was very cute and adorable. As soon as I went nearby, she busted into tears and was crying as if I was about to snatch something and her mom came wondering who was going to kidnap her daughter. I explained her about my innocence but she seemed unconvincing. I rarely attend the classes. The problem is that whenever I attend the class, the class gets canceled, and even if the class runs, the lecturer won't take the attendance. I don't understand why always it rains whenever I had a head-bath.

The best days of my B.Tech life are no doubt, the semester break holidays. Causes, only then I get to meet my school buddies and enjoy myself to the full. Last December, I was very much excited because this time I am celebrating the New Year with my school friends. The main purpose of this post is to narrate 3 days of my life on which my ill-fates have ridden high spirits. The 3 days are crammed full of good to great to terrific fun.

niraj /  
Sep 6, 2009   #2
VERY GOOD ESSAY,
EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Sep 7, 2009   #3
Oh dear. Short, useless comments like this will get your account suspended very quickly. You must give others the sort of feedback you hope to get on your own work. AND DON'T SHOUT!

Now, about the essay:

What is the purpose of this essay? Is it a school assignment, one that asks you to make fun of your own misfortunes? Or are you just writing for the fun of it? In any event, you are too obvious about telling the reader that you plan to be lighthearted for the tone to actually come across that way.
OP mikemorpheus 1 / 1  
Sep 7, 2009   #4
Thanks for your time and consideration for my essay.

Now, regarding the essay, it is not an assignment. I am writing it for a post in my blog. The above is the first 3 paragraphs of my post. It is followed by a funny story in which I was continuously been the suspect of some funny and no-so-harmful misfortunes for the 3 days. The purpose of this essay is to reminiscent these 3 days.

Now my point is that the reader should enjoy the funny story without imagining me as lighthearted or spiritless. Please help me with the vocabulary and grammar. I shall post the remaining part of the essay soon.


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