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IELTS TASK I : Britons weekly expenditure on fast food (two charts)


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 27, 2014   #1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task
The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the weekly spending by Britons on three types of fast food: Hamburgers, Fish and Chips and Pizza, while the line graph present the fast-food consumption during a period of 20 years, between 1970 and 1990.

Overall, the all mentioned figures are varied noticeably, while Hamburger noted as the most favourite fast food for high and average earners, the low earners ate much Fish and Chips. Meanwhile, between 1970 and 1990 the increasing consumption of Hamburger is far higher than that of the Pizza and Fish and chips experience a dip consumption.

As per bar chart information, high-income group was more likely to consume hamburger, accounted more than 40 pence per person. It accounted more than twofold expenditure by comparison with the low-income group which spent 14 Hamburger per pence per week. The average-income people also consumed hamburger around 32 pence per week, while they ate more pence Fish and Chip compared to the previous groups, rising to around 8 pence. In case of lower earner the expenditure on Pizza stance as the least 7 pence standing in contrast with other 20 pence and 12 pence consumed by the two other earner groups.

A more detailed look at curve line movement reveals that the consumption pattern over statistic years was not always similar. While Fish and Chips decline slightly from 300 grammes in 1970 to around 220 in 1990, Hamburger and Pizza consumption rose tremendously over 20 years under review. Coming 100 grammes consumption in 1970 Pizza's consumption rocketed to reach a peak by more than 500 grammes in 1990, whereas pizza showed a less grammes by comparison with the former trend. In 1970, the average 50 grammes Pizza consumed by Britons began to rise dramatically onward to come nearly 300 grammes in the end of measurement.





eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 27, 2014   #2
The bar chart shows the weekly spending by Britons on three types of fast food: Hamburgers, Fish and Chips and Pizza, while the line graph present the fast-food consumption during a period of 20 years, between 1970 and 1990.

Well done :D

Overall, the all mentioned figures are varied noticeably, while Hamburger noted as the most favourite fast food for high and average earners, the low earners ate much Fish and Chips. Meanwhile, between 1970 and 1990 the increasing consumption of Hamburger is far higher than that of the Pizza and Fish and chips experience a dip consumption.

This is very good :D
Personally, you have attempted to compare the vital keys, but missed badly.
The two graphs are connected . If I were you, I would start analyzing the first graph from the right to left side; the low to high income group. The same thing could happen again, but from the left to right one of the second graph. Those points I compare.

previous groups,

Please help me, which 'previous groups' do you mean here? Also this:

rising to around 8 pence

needs referring.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 27, 2014   #3
Personally, you have attempted to compare the vital keys, but missed badly.
The two graphs are connected. If I were you, I would start analyzing the first graph from the right to left side; the low to high income group. The same thing could happen again, but from the left to right one of the second graph. Those points I compare.

.... Overall, by comparison with average-income and low-income, Pizza and Hamburger is likely to consume by the highest-income group. Also, the figures of the two junk food increase gradually over a-20 years under review. Meanwhile, fish-and-chip consumptions decrease before leveling off in the same period of time. Such food becomes the most favorites for low-income group.

Please help me, which 'previous groups' do you mean here?

here I mean, eddies

As per bar chart information, high-income group was more likely to consume hamburger, accounted more than 40 pence per person. It accounted more than twofold expenditure by comparison with the low-income group which spent 14 Hamburger per pence per week.

rising to around 8 pence
needs referring.

...While high-income and low-income consuming 18 pence fish-and-chips weekly, the moderate earner eat 25 pence weekly,a-8 pence raising.

Honestly it is made more than 20 minutes. while you say that it is good enough,to me personally, this is too long for making in the exam. I am also weak in observing which part of diagram that i should compare and noted in the essay. In the beginning I tend to compare the highest and the lowest but the problems come when I should mention the moderate one. :((
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 27, 2014   #4
I am also weak in observing which part of diagram that i should compare and noted in the essay.

Don't sweat the small stuff, dear. Overall, your job is already good :D

Good luck for your exam.

uupppsss, a good note I found on net below:

Single graphs
Introduction: Here you sould state what the graph shows
Short body paragraph: state the most important piece of information here (summary/overview)
Main body paragraphs: Here you need to make comparisons and state the important features of the graphs (usually 2 paragraphs)

Double graphs
Introduction: Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g "This first bart chart shows..., and the second chart illustrates
Short body: Write 2 sentences. If the information in the charts is not connected, find one main point or general trend for each chart. If the charts are connected, try to make comparisons

Main body paragraphs: If the two charts are completely different (e.g. a graph and a table), write a separate paragraph about each. If the charts are the same, and show the same information (e.g. 2 pie charts), do not describe them separately, the examiner will want to see comparisons. In this case, you could write one paragraph describing all of the information, but it is still more preferable to write two paragraphs because it makes the essay look more organized
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 27, 2014   #5
Don't sweat the small stuff, dear. Overall, your job is already good :D

...yiieha *dancing

Good luck for your exam.

Thank you in advance, monsieur :DDD
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 27, 2014   #6
the line graph presentpresents the fast-food consumption during a period of 20 years, between 1970 and 1990.

Overall, the all mentioned figures are varied noticeably, while Hamburger noted as the most favourite fast food for high and average earners, the low earners ate much Fish and Chips. Meanwhile, between 1970 and 1990 the increasing consumption of Hamburger is far higher than that of the Pizza and Fish and chips experience a dip consumption.

First time i wrote this prompt i was writing in four paragraphs
www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/task-amount-money-per-week- spent-fast-foods-britain-rewrite-55498/

In the second time i attempted to follow ialf's pattern with 6 paragraphs
www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/task-fast-foods-britain-554 40 /

as a result, i take a summarize that if we have difficulty to identify an overview, we can analyse the data and make an analyse paragraph.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
May 8, 2014   #7
you can make more clear explanation

It is already clear. What you should do is to re-peruse that of your own volition. Hence, you won't commit perpetually repetitive works, which are perhaps the most frustrating ones.
ShineStarJoti 2 / 5  
May 8, 2014   #8
Thanks SHanafi for sharing your ideas related to the graph . I am new here in this froum bt your writting is very helpfull to me .
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 8, 2014   #9
your writting is very helpfull to me .

you are welcome Jyoti. I am glad that it is helpful enough for you. Also, I suggest you not only read my essay but also the advices from moderator and contributors given above. By the way, I wait for your beneficial advice in my another writing. Welcome to essay forum :D
andial 21 / 48 3  
May 8, 2014   #10
the all mentioned figures are varied noticeably, while Hamburger noted as the most favourite fast food for high and average earners, the low earners ate much Fish and Chips

Hi Sekar, for your information : we do not use most with this adjective: most favorite but we say least favorite to mean the opposite of favorite
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 8, 2014   #11
Hi, Andi

least favorite to mean the opposite of favorite

... I think once even twice about your advice. Then I back to the graph, it depicts hamburger as the highest trend in both groups. I still dive onto vast confusion, why should I mentioned the opposite of favorite while it was the favourite.

like you say...CMIW


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