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tranhishere 1 / -  
Jun 3, 2024   #1
The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart displays energy consumption in the average household in Australia, while the second pie chart illustrates the greenhouse gas emissions that come from this energy consumption.

It is clear that heating energy as the primary consumer of energy, with water heating contributing significantly to greenhouse gas emissions.
With australian household energy use, it is apparent that heating account for approximately 42% which is the highest percentage of the pie chart. However, heating only contributes 15% to greenhouse gas emissions and it is nearly half of consumption. In the contrary, the proportion of consumption for cooling is the lowest figure in the chart and it stand at 2%, while it contribute to greenhouse gas emissions with 3%.

The highest percentage of Australian household greenhouse gas emissions is the water heating with 32%, while it ranks next to heating energy and it less than almost 10%. With other appliances, it contributes to greenhouse gas emissions nearly double the amount consumed. Additionally, the energy of refrigeration accounts for 7% the consumotion of the using energy while their emissions stand at 14% of the total.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15342  
Jun 12, 2024   #2
The summary overview should be composed of at least 2 sentences, covering at least 40 words. Your presentation does not appropriately summarize the given information. The trending statement is difficult to understand even after several readings. There is a problem with the sentence structure. The idea you are presenting is not clear, even in ESL terms. This lack of clarity will definitely affect your TA, C+C, and GRA scores in the preliminary scoring stage. Those sections will receive failing scores. Kindly reference the spelling of the country properly as well. All countries are spelled with a capital letter. Also, there is no word such as consumotion in the English vocabulary. It is important that you improve your English vocabulary skills if you wish to pass this test.


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