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The causes of worldwide land degradation (in percent) and the consequences of such phenomenon

badafebriani17 34 / 44 1  
Oct 29, 2016   #1
the pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart shows information about the main factors that causes where agricultural land experience decreasing of function which occur in three continents of the world during 1999s. The table gives overview about the number of degradation land based on the area (North America, Europe and near Australia). Overall, the highest causes of grand degradation came from over-grazing in farming activity. The greatest degradation occure in Europe.

Based on the pie chart, the percentage of over-grazing was accounted 35%, and it was dominated among other causes. The second highest came from increasing forest function and illegal logging, at 30%. The least number came from other reasons.

The table illustrate that Europe was as main contributor in degradation, at 23% which it gave 9,8 of deforestation and 7,7 over cultivation. However, Europe is the highest percentage totally, but other islands including Australia and New Zealand gave the largest number of over-grazing and they were not experienced in over-cultivation.

In conclusion, the worldwide land degradation most caused by over-grazing and the friendlier land is North America.

SarlindaDS_27 42 / 52 5  
Oct 29, 2016   #2
Hello..Good morning miss Bada :) Let me tell you my opinions about your summary :)

Overall, now you can express your idea better than before :) Nice try when I see you can make some grouping and comparison of the data. But I think the little weakness of your summary is related with your diction choices still not appropriate. For example :

> agricultural land experience decreasing ==> Not "experience" but "experienced". You also can use another words such as {soil decreased, ground reduction or soil derivation}

> was accounted ==> Not "accounted" but "counted by"

Well, miss Bada keep practice and make it perfect next time GOOD LUCK ^_^

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