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It's certainly true that happiness is an essential component of every human life - IELTS



bayratak 2 / 4  
Sep 30, 2014   #1
Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?


It's certainly true that happiness is an essential component of every human life. However, I believe that finding a definition of happiness is not an easy task and there are many factors to consider on the way to achieve happiness.

It seems to me that every individual has a unique set of characteristics and therefore, a different opinion of life. For that reason, generalizations about life and happiness can not be valid for everyone. For example, while a materialistic person can consider an expensive gift as a reason to be happy, same gift can be interpreted in a negative way. Furthermore, in my opinion, the life itself is not a stable organism so that definitions are always subject to change with changing opinions of individuals which can come with age, education, or new social situations.

On the other hand, plenty of reasons play an important role to obtain happiness. Firstly, I believe that health is the primary factor to sustain before seeking happiness because in my view, there is no room for joy without a healthy life. Secondly, certain survival needs such as shelter and food must be met for someone to be happy. Lastly, one should have a close social environment to share his happiness. In other words, happiness to be not shared is not a happiness.

In conclusion, even though it's difficult to make a clear definition of happiness due to changing characteristics of the life and there are many factors can affect people's happiness, it's clear that every individual needs happiness in life.

Word Count: 256

Thank you for all feedbacks and possible band scores!


ritairianti 3 / 11  
Sep 30, 2014   #2
actually.. i don't know about prediction your band.
however, i like your essay and you are explain clearly about your opinion.
in my view, you will get great band.

... Furthermore, in my opinion, the life itself is not a stable organism so that definitions are always subject to change with changing opinions of individuals which can come with age, education, or new social situations.

i think, "in my opinion" is enough.

and don't using abbreviation "it's" , just write "it is " ..

overall.. i learn a lot from your essay.
you write well-structure and great essay. :)
OP bayratak 2 / 4  
Sep 30, 2014   #3
Thank you so much for the feedbacks and comments!
:)
Vns9x 102 / 230  
Sep 30, 2014   #4
Firstly,i am not the IELTS taker. However, i consider your essay pretty short. Consequently, my advice for you is to allot an ample time supporting your ideas by providing a few examples.
OP bayratak 2 / 4  
Oct 7, 2014   #5
Thank you for the feedback Vns9x!

If I have time during the exam, I will add some more examples like you said but unfortunately given time is not enough always.


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