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Essay about the changes in the number of Vietnamese students studying abroad.


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Apr 7, 2020   #1

Students from Vietnam in France, America and Russia



The line graph compares data on the changes in the number of Vietnamese students receiving academic education in three different nations, namely France, America and Russia from 2000 to 2015.

Overall, there was an increase in the quantity of Vietnamese students enrolling in French and American schools, whereas the opposite trend was detected in Russia. Noticeably, American witnessed the biggest change during the researched period.

In 2000, there were initially about 1.5 million Vietnamese studying in America, while the figures for France and Russia were far higher, with over 3 million for the former and approximately 3.5 million for the latter. Over the next five years, the number of students from Vietnam in America grew slightly by about 0.5 million. On the contrary, the figures for Russia and France dropped considerably by almost 1 million.

From 2005, the quantity of Vietnamese students studying in America schools continued to increase sharply by almost 1 million in 2010 while that in French schools remained relatively unchanged. In 2015, the data for the three countries simultaneously went up. While the figures for America and France surged dramatically to reach their peaks at 5 and 4.5 million, respectively, the number of Vietnamese students in Russia rose slightly to 2.5 million after experiencing minor change in 2010.




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Apr 7, 2020   #2
You kind of let your writing get away from you in this task. The ideal word count is 175-190. The perfect number of words to write within 20 minutes that will allow you to have a pocket of time to perfect your presentation. Writing 212 words could very well cut into your Task 2 writing time. Please time yourself next time. Also, use the the hand writing technique for writing your essay so that you will know the difference in time usage between tapping away at the keyboard and actually writing the essay as required at the testing center. Then you will know exactly why you cannot write too many words using the pen and paper technique.

You forgot to include a reference to the measurement used in the graph. Always make sure that the highlighted information in the image is included in the summary. There is a reason those information are highlighted. These are important to the reader and should therefore, be included in the report using one form or another.

Let's get something clear here. American is the person who comes from America. America is the name of the country the American comes from. Therefore, it was America, not American that saw the increase in its figures. Now, save for the missing comparison points in your presentation with regards to the overlapping portions of the information from the graph, you presented a pretty solid report to the reader. Over written, but definitely solid.

I am emphasizing the number of words because the tendency of students during practice essays is to disregard the actual exam setting. You have to make sure that you keep within the time frame during the practice test so that you won't be surprised by your inability to complete the essay within the given time frame on the exam day. If you always write under the time limit and have the time to review your work before moving on to the next essay, then you will definitely be increasing your chances at a higher score for this task.


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