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Question :
The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Answer :
The given bar graph illustrates information about the number of sports played in New Zealand by girls and boy with different sports in 2012. As is observed from the graph, both of them describe that their participatory in sports is almost same. However, the preference of their sports is different.
The bar graph compares of sports by girls and boy and compare with percentation between girls and boys. Soccer is the most popular sport among the boys, with percentation reaching 25 percent. It is similar with netball. The percentation approximately 26 percent. This is a famous sport by girls.
A few girls chooses a game of cricket while boys takes part in this game almost 10 percent. Boys and Girls play swimming in 13 percent and almost 22 percent. It becomes popular sport of them. On the other hand, the kind of sports such as tennis, basketball, and martial arts are not popular sports.
Could you give a strong critical comment? as a leraners i very hope feedback from all member. i believe it can improve y skill in writing task. Thanks
Question :
The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Answer :
The given bar graph illustrates information about the number of sports played in New Zealand by girls and boy with different sports in 2012. As is observed from the graph, both of them describe that their participatory in sports is almost same. However, the preference of their sports is different.
The bar graph compares of sports by girls and boy and compare with percentation between girls and boys. Soccer is the most popular sport among the boys, with percentation reaching 25 percent. It is similar with netball. The percentation approximately 26 percent. This is a famous sport by girls.
A few girls chooses a game of cricket while boys takes part in this game almost 10 percent. Boys and Girls play swimming in 13 percent and almost 22 percent. It becomes popular sport of them. On the other hand, the kind of sports such as tennis, basketball, and martial arts are not popular sports.
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