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IELTS [Chart Interpretation]:Domestic access to modern technology by residents of UK



vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 2, 2010   #1
Dear friends, it seems we cannot incert any image here. But I do need help with my Task 1 writing, please give me some advice on the following report. I am sorry to make you through this kind of academic writing without the illustration chart :( But I do appreciate your time and patience a lot. Thank you.

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at leat 150 words.

The line graph analyses changes in proportion of four approaches to modern technology in British households from 1996 to 2003: CD player, mobile phone, home computer and Internet access.

Obviously, there was an upward trend in all four items involved, though the trend in mobile phone was rather erratic. To be specific, during this period, CD player had remained the most popular technological device in the UK among these four, with the largest proportiong rising steadily from 60% to about 83%. Likewise, a slight but solid increase in the percentage of home computer maintained from 30% in 1996/97 to approximately 55%.

A noticeable change could be seen in mobile phone ownership. In 1996/97, this new communication tool accounted for only less than one fifth percentage, which made it the least popular device at that time. However, there was staggering rise in its penetration over the following years, and the ownership finally ended up at 70% in 2002/03, overtaking home computer as the second most popular device.

Data of the Internet access have only been available since 1998, when it occupied a slice of 10% of the dommestic access to modern technology in British households. During the following half decade, the proliferation kept expanding and the figure almost quadrupled to nearly 50%.

Undoubtedly, according to the chart, modern technology is playing an increasingly important role in British daily life. (228 words)

P.S. 1. Can I regard the Internet access as a "device"?
2. Do I have to capitalize the first letter whenever using the word "Internet"?


Thank you very much.

zhangqin 3 / 6  
Apr 2, 2010   #2
the Internet (also 'the internet')
the large system of connected computers around the world which allows people to share information and communicate with each other using email
I found out about the bombings from/on the Internet.

(Definition of the Internet noun from the Cambridge Advanced Learner's Dictionary)

According to the dictionary, I think there is no difference whether to capitalize the first letter or not.
OP vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 13, 2010   #3
Here is the link leading to the relevant graph: Any advice and comments about my writing? Thank you very much.
greentea93 7 / 26  
Apr 13, 2010   #4
CD player (delete had) remained the most popular technological device in the UK

Your writing is too long,while it is supposed at least 150 words. As far as I am concerned,in IELTS exam,you just have 20mins to finish task1 and if it is too long,you may get low score.
OP vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 14, 2010   #5
Tran, thank you for your correction. I see my problems too -- always writing too much, always trying to cover more information. I will try to make it neat. Thank you:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 14, 2010   #6
Hi Vivien (or Wei, what do I cal you?)

I always have trouble commenting on these because i don't know how they are scored. Your writing is wonderful, and I hope you proceed with the kind of confidence that makes you feel relaxed and bold. You are doing so well!!

don't be intimidated by charts... they are just things to talk about. To make this interesting, give a meaningful observation about what it all means, what can be expected, etc.

:-)
OP vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 14, 2010   #7
Hi Kevin, thank you. You are right. It's just so dreadful.

I read some articles of the Daily Charts on (in?) The Economist, but the thing is, the magazine holds a dryly ironic tone which I don't think is suitable for academic writing(or, maybe a little humor could be fun?).

Anyway, I will try to relax and enjoy it rather thank freak out.

Thank you very much, and call me Wei. :)


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