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The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films


Riophan1007 1 / -  
May 8, 2022   #1

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The graph illustrates the number of films rented and sold in a variety of formats during the period of ten years, starting in 2002.
Overall, the number of rentals and VHS sales experienced gradual drops throughout the years. Meanwhile, the opposite was true to the sale of DVD and blue-ray films.

In 2002, the figure for rented films started at over 180 thousand a year and started to plummet to nearly 60 thousand in the year of 2011. Similarly, VHS sales saw a dramatic decrease from 85 thousand in 2002 to its lowest point of 10 thousand in 2005 before paving the way for the other forms of films.

Between 2002 and 2007, it can be seen that DVD was the most preferred form of films which experienced a remarkable increase from nearly 50 thousand to over 200 thousand in terms of sales followed by a slight decrease over the next 5 years. Blue-ray films began to be included in the four formats in 2007 with 2 thousand versions sol;d, and slightly went up to over 5 thousand in 2011.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,686 4117  
May 9, 2022   #2
As there are several types of graphs used in a task 1 essay, the summary presentation should use a graph type identifier (line, row bar, column bar, etc.) for specific image reference purposes. That will help the summary presentation achieve a clearer pre-report analysis clarity. While it is definitely easier to refer to "10 years" but, it is too simplistic and will not help increase the LR score.Try to use a more advanced alternate word. "Decade" is the go to alternate but other references like decennary would also work. Since this is a reporting essay, more complex vocabulary should be present.

in the year

This should reference a steady decline in measurement so "by the year " would have been the more appropriate measurement reference phrase. At this point, it has become clear to me that the writer needs more LR and GRA skills development.


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