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Films in diverse formats at store 2002-2011 - rentals figure had the highest number at the beginning


tiraatira11 21 / 9 2  
Apr 6, 2016   #1
The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The bar chart illustrates the number of diverse type of movies rented and sold in store over a decade. Overall, it can be seen that rentals figure had the highest numbers at the beginning. While between 2004 and 2011 DVD sales produced the biggest income, in the middle of period VHS sales figure replaced by Blu-ray sales.

According to the data, most of the customers tended to rent movies rather than to buy in 2002 which reached of 180.000 rentals and followed by VHS sales placed as second in sales number at just under 100,000 while DVD sales stood at 50,000. However, from 2002 to 2007 experienced a gradual drop in rental's numbers whereas the number of DVD sales peaked at 210,000. At the end of period, these two figures remained stable at their position as the first (DVD sales) and the second (rentals).

Interestingly, VHS sales number decreased dramatically between 2002 and 2005 from 50,000 to 10,000 and in 2006 this figures disappeared from the chart. Then, over a following year, there was a new format movies sale replacing VHS which was Blu-ray. There was a slight increase in the number of Blu-ray sales over 5 years and it was the least popular on consumers at store.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Apr 6, 2016   #2
Hi Siti, reminder on posting the chart, this is very essential as I've mention from previous remarks that this is where we base our analysis. Moreover, necessary information from the chart will also help us analyze the facts and figures that is noted in your essay.

Anyhow,judging the essay base on the English language rules, you were able to create a good picture of the chart and I must say, the words are constructed in a way that the chart can be written as an essay itself.

Moreover, the presentation of your analysis is also up to standard, not long and not short, the figures, the sales as well as the numbers was able to observe a uniform format and this is also important in presenting the analysis.

Again, I may not be able to conclude how this essay is written due to lack of pertinent information, otherwise, it is due written.
dina79 20 / 26 3  
Apr 6, 2016   #3
Overall, it can be seen that therentals figure had the highest numbers at the beginning

At the end of period, these two figures remained stable at their position as the first (DVD sales) and the second (rentals).
my paraphrase

the timetable had two figures to explain their position as the first (DVD sales) and the second (rentals).


Interestingly, VHS sales number decreased dramatically between 2002 and 2005 from 50,000 to 10,000 and in 2006 this figures disappeared from the chart
Surprisingly, VHS sales number slowly down dramatically at 2002 until 2005 with amount lost value $40000 and the figures at 2006 disappeared from the chart


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