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The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed


Cyllyn 13 1 / -  
Nov 27, 2023   #1
The charts compare the percentage of students who graduated from secondary school in Australia who were unemployed, employed, or in further education over the course of 20 years.

Overall, the proportion of students who continued studying in Australia decreased constantly. The opposite trend was true for the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates. In addition, there was a slight fluctuation in the proportion of people who graduated without a job from secondary school.

In 1980, around 50% of Australian secondary school graduates were in further education, this figure declined significantly to about 37% in 2000. Besides, the proportion of students who graduated had a job accounted for 40%, this figure increased gradually to 50% in 1990 and, 55% in 2000.

From 1980 to 2000, there was a slight fluctuation in the percentage of people who were jobless after graduating from secondary school and reached a peak of 12% in 1990 in Australia.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,844 4785  
Nov 28, 2023   #2
The image information is incomplete. You have not provided any data regarding the number of charts, and what specific sort of chart was used. In this case, you should have identified 3 pie charts and what each pie represents. That way the reader would have had a clear picture of how the pie chart is being used in the report.

In terms of analysis, the essay is too short. It could use more explanations and information presentation. At only 153 words, you have not left yourself with a large scoring allowance should deductions be applied to your work in relation to possible errors. The safest word count is always 175 words. 200 at the most. Always consider the deductions when writing your essay.


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