The charts show the methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009

commuting to school charts

The pie charts compare the rate of people commuting to one university by five means transport in the year 2004 and 2009.
As can be seen from the charts, while car was the most favoured mode of transport in 2004, the majority of people travelled to the university by bus in 2009. Also, train was the least used method of transport in the two years.

In 2004, over half of travellers to the university were car users, followed by 33% of those commuting by bus. Meanwhile, the percentages of cyclists, walkers, and train passengers were 9%, 4%, and 3%, respectively.

The 5-following-year period witnessed a roughly twofold decrease in the proportion of individuals driving to the university, while the opposite was true for the figure for cyclists. In the meantime, the rates of bus and rail travellers were 46% and 4%, correspondingly, in comparison with 6% walking to the university.

How many images were provided and how were the information sections divided in the chart? How was each chart identified? What was the combined or individual measurement basis? These are but some of the pertinent information missing from the summary overview. Essential data elements were ignored in that section. The result? A summary that does not actually help inform the leader in the most understandable and concise manner.

The reporting paragraphs do not show evidence of extensive information analysis either. With each paragraph using only 2 sentenceseach, most of the writing is based on the GRA deduction causing run-on presentations. The writer needs to become more familiar with proper intermediate to advanced sentence presentation skills to overcome that shortcoming in his writing skill.