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The charts show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia


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Oct 3, 2023   #1

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The pie charts compare electricity consumption by a various fields in Eastern Australia in two years 2007 and 2010.

Overall, the consumption of electricity for residental sector accounted for the largest propotion in all two years (2007 and 2010), while the reserve was true for transport and agriculture. It was also noticeable that the amount forr electricity consumed forr those sectors remained mostly unchanged except for aluminium, manufacturing, and other metals fields.

In 2007, just over half of the total electricity was consumed by the residential and commercial sectors, at 28% and 23% respectively. Agriculture and transport both accounted for a mere 1% each in 2007, while mining consumed 9% of the total electricity produced. There was no change in the figures for these sectors after 3 years.

Turning to the remaining sectors, we can see that the manufacturing and aluminium sectors both consumed 13% of the total electricity used in 2007, after which their consumption fell marginally to 9% and 11% respectively in 2010. By contrast, the other metals sector saw an increase from 12% to 18% between 2007 and 2010.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,648 4752  
Oct 8, 2023   #2
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I think you made a wrong word choice here. I believe you meant to say reverse. Which refers to the alternate information provided for this section in the image. If I am right, then you would have lost points in both the LR and GRA sections due to incorrect word choice and word usage, resulting in incorrect grammar and sentence structure.

You also constantly misspelled the word "for" in this essay as "forr", highlighting the fact that you did not really care about properly using words or spelling them in the essay. Simple technical errors such as these have a huge effect on your final score. These mistakes, left uncorrected during an actual test, could result in a failing score.


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