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IELTS-Many children these days have their own mobile phones. advantages/disadvantages



devabe2005 46 / 96  
Feb 2, 2013   #1
QUESTION:
Many children these days have their own mobile phones. What are advantages and disadvantages? Give your own opinion.

ANSWER:
Mobile phones play major role in communication. Parents are giving mobile phones to their children to communicate effectively. It has both merits and demerits. I believe that children using mobile gadgets are very harmful for their cancer.

Some of the advantages of cell phones are parents want to talk their children with the help of global positioning system. For emergency, children will learn to talk or involve in conversation effectively. Children can relax with mobile or chat with their friends. Parents can use it for motivation to completing their home work or come to home on time.

On the other hand, children will play game on the cell phone. They are addicted towards the games which will spoil their studies and due to that result in obesity problem in children. Continuous usage of cell phone results in stress and anxiety for the children. Their fingers are affected due to nonstop usage of key pad in mobile. Some children used to talk with their friends for long hours which result in high phone bill for their parents. While travelling, children are distracted by their phone call and met with accidents and even death in some cases. Children health is affected by magnetic waves in it. They may suffer severe disease such as brain cancer.

To conclude, misusage cell phone by children will harmful for their future. They are easily distracted by attractive features of the mobile and spoil their studies. Limit usage of mobile phone and proper parent supervision help children to learn and operate the mobile in extraordinary way of success in their future lives.

ss2320 - / 4  
Feb 2, 2013   #2
Concluding, the misuse of mobile phones will harm the future of today's younger generation.Childrenget easily distracted by the attractive features of the mobiles and hamper their studies .
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 3, 2013   #3
Mobile phones play a major role in communication.

.... it's important to have this "a" in this line.

Parents are giving mobile phones to their children to communicate effectively.

Parents are allowing children to have mobile phones mainly because they want to communicate with their own children.

. I believe that children using mobile gadgetsphones can beare very harmful for their cancer in many respects.

... I think there are more important negative issues that mobile phones can cause such as addiction to electronic devices, helping crimes, distancing people etc.

misusage cell phone

misuse of cell phones

Continuous usage of cell phone results in stress and anxiety for the children.

.... good sentence.


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