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Children are very sensitive about what they see or hear from their friends



Dibaa 1 / -  
Dec 21, 2012   #1
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends - agree/disagree?

Albeit some people think that teachers have the most important role in affecting students, I personally believe that human beings in their childish period of their life are very sensitive about what they see or hear from their friends. There are many aspects of aspects to prove this, which just quit significant of them are listed here.

First and actually the most important reason which impressed me to disagree with this matter is some psychological articles which I've already read about learning process in kids. Those papers say that students learn some facts from their teacher as well as their parents. But children, whom are mostly student, learn most in their games with their friends. They see and hear around carefully and try to copy their behavior precisely in own actions and most of them try to operate as an older brothers' and sisters'. So, I think friends of kids are more role model person for students, in the school and in anywhere than their teacher.

Second reason that can persuade us about influencing role of students' friends in comparison their teacher is that based on some proved theory about human beings' behavior, people and especially children learn more when they are teached indirectly. When the student learns some matters in the class, they probably forget them or will never use the lessons in their real life. But the rules and facts which are learned through their games and speak with their friends directly reveal on their life and behavior.

As a conclusion, I can say that students and generally human being have actual learn occur when the subject is experienced by her or him directly and so, while the teacher try to teach something without any experience, the behavior and lessons from friends' of student can be more effective.

StephR 4 / 14  
Dec 21, 2012   #2
There are many aspects of aspects to prove this, which just quit significant of them are listed here .
- REWORD
First and actually the most important reason which impressed me to disagree with this matter is some psychological articles which I've already read about learning process in kids. -REWORD

i get what your trying to say and its good, but i think you just have to reword a bunch of things and i would probably not use like first reason and like second reason
dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 21, 2012   #3
Albeit some people think that teachers have the most important role in affectinginfluencing students

..." influencing" is more appropriate.

I personally believe that human beings in their childish period of their life are very sensitive about what they see or hear from their friends.

...the appropriate word is "childhood".
Also what is your opinion? do you agree with the statement or disagree with it? ... Your opinion is not very clearly expressed :(
You need to pay more attention to the sentence structure. Read good essays that you find in this forum. They would be really helpful : )
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 22, 2012   #4
hai..

There are many aspects of aspects.... : i didn't understand..

Your essay is little bit confusing.

Try to read more and more essays..

Tessy
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 22, 2012   #5
There are many aspects of aspects to prove this, which just quit significant of them are listed here.

????? I don't understand this sentence. Please rephrase it.

First and actually the most important reason which impressed me to disagree with this matter is some psychological articles which I've already read about learning process in kids.

First and foremost, it is proven psychologically that children are influenced more by their peers than by their teachers.

You have good points but you need to work on your presentation.


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