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Children's work at a early age - beneficial or a threat ?


ninaaxtopol 1 / 2 2  
Jul 13, 2013   #1
Children's labor is a hot topic nowadays. Some people truly believe that encouraging children to work at an early age will be beneficial for them through making them understand the real value of money and teaching them of discipline. On the other hand, people work through their whole life, saving for a home, or a car, their children's education and so on, and therefore an instant question is coming - should children start to work so young and isn't enough that they will be working for the rest of their life, to start even earlier?

The most important years of your life, people say, are the one when you are young. You can dream your life, everything is bright and rosy. You don't see the world in it's negative side, you have your future ahead and your dream about it.

Allowing children to start work at an early age will destroy their childhood.
Many children will be forced to work by their parent for different reasons. What is worst is that years that are meant to be spend in the park, playing with friends and developing yourself physically and mentally, you will spend working.

Furthermore, children will be hired for the least qualified jobs on the market, because they don't have any experience and qualifications.
Therefore, while understanding as well the positive part of working at an early age - discipline, understanding the value of money, support for yourself and your family, the real impact of allowing child labor at an early age will be more negative than contributional in my opinion.

Taking the dream of the rosy world from a child, forcing him/her to become an adult will not make him/her a better person.

Life has its periods and stages and you have to pass all of them, thus making mistakes and learning from them. Child labor will take this time of life when we are all supposed to prepare for what is coming.
ldlsky03 8 / 16 2  
Jul 13, 2013   #2
to be spend
to be spent
spend working
=>spend time on working
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 14, 2013   #3
Children's labor is a hot topic nowadays.

.... don't open your essay with sentences like these. Try to introduce your topic with more meaningful sentences. Leave this sentence out and start with the second one. That makes more sense;

Some peopletruly believe that encouraging children to work at an early age will be beneficial for them throughby making them understand the real value of money and teaching them of discipline.

... Reduce its length and split it to two sentences;
Some people believe that young children are benefited by starting to work at an early age. They claim that children would learn the value of money as well as they would become more disciplined if they start working young.


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