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Chinese Astronauts Back on Earth After Monthlong Stay in Space



yurikeyuri 43 / 49  
Nov 30, 2016   #1
Two Chinese astronauts, Jing Haipeng and Chen Dong, went to space by Shenzhou 11 vehicle for monthlong stay which it is the sixth and longest crewed China's mission and the growing ambitions of advancing space program. They come back on earth with good condition and they spent 30 days aboard for conducting experiment and preparation of equipment. The space program has realized new progress and can contribute in the innovation and a world power of science and technology of the country. the reputation of the space program that China has launched two space stations, staged a spacewalk, landed a rover on the moon and is now considering sending a crewed lunar mission. The another country is funding the china's space program to Tiangong 2, which, at 60 tons when completed, would still be considerably smaller than the 420-ton ISS.

Source : TIME

Abrahamlincoln 54 / 50  
Nov 30, 2016   #2
Dear Yuri
Let me give you some inputs

... and Chen Dong , went to space by Shenzhou 11 vehicles for the monthlong stay which it is the sixth ...

... they spent 30 days aboard for conducting experiments and preparation of equipments .

The space program has revealedrealized new progress and can contribute in the innovation and a world ... . into innovative findings and become the power of science and technology of the country.

Note: please simplify your vocabulary, don't too similar to the original version. you have to paraphrase the word and make your own. good luck


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