in this day and age.
There is no need to add this memorized please to the sentence. It makes the sentence definitely sound ESL and kind of weakens the grammar range in terms of sentence structure and writing control. Avoid memorized please use in your essays going forward. Those are definitely score lowering references.
suppose
You cannot suppose. When you suppose, you ask the reader to consider (something) as a possibility suggested or an idea or plan proposed. while you might refer to this as a point of arguement, the score you recieve in a task 2 essay is based on the validity and clarity of your opinion. The use of this word instead indicates uncertainty thus negating your originally stated opinion.
Given this situation, the government should apply more optimal measures
The instruction does not include the presentation of a possible solution. Adding unnecessary discussion points, specially in the concluding summary will cause additional deductions to the score. By the way, you forgot to include the topic replacement before the reasoning summary.