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The coal was the most popular energy source in France - years 1995 and 2005


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
Writing task 3 : Comparison Energy of Production

The pie charts compare the percentage of France's energy production in 5 categories in 1995 and 2005. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the highest production of energy was coal, while other had the smallest proportion in both years.

The coal was the most popular energy in France, it successfully broke a record as the greatest proportion by 1995 (29,80 %) and 2005 (30,93%). The production of petro in 1995 was higher than in 2005 at 29,27 % and 19,55 % respectively, when it was also recorded as the biggest difference of proportion. On the other hand, there was a slight increase of gas production in first and second period, when it produced 29,63 and 30,31 percent successively.

The nuclear and other became uncommon energy which was produced in both years. The nuclear energy produced in 1995 was 6,4 % and increased to 10,1 % in 2005. While the production of other was 4, 9 percent and grew even bigger to 9,1 percent in 2005.



Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
Hi aris. Here is some advices for your writing.

... was coal, while other ha[n]d the smallest proportion [is] in both years. ťť {S + V }

Be careful of the spelling.
Hope it really useful for you. Best regards
Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 16, 2016   #3
Hey Aris05
Those following corrections to make your essay even better :

Compere has to followed by to not in
The coal was the most popular (common/ general ) energy (popular energy isn't appropriate adj ) in France, it successfully broke ...
... higher than in 2005, at it was 29,27 % and 19,55 % respectively...

Thanks
Best regard
ifan21
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Sep 16, 2016   #4
hai aris
I have some suggestions for you
I hope it helps you

The pie charts compares the percentage of France's energy production inconsist of5five categories infrom 1995 andto 2005. Overall, it can be clearly seen that, the highest production ...

The production of petro in 1995 was higher than in 2005 at ...I don't understand about this sentencemaybe you can usethe production of petro in 1995 at 29,27%, while in 2005, produce 19,55% and it is noticeable that usage petro in 1995 was higher than 2005.

... increase of gas production in the first and the second period, when it ...

The nuclear and others became uncommon energy ...


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