IELTS WRITING TASK 1: COFFEE AND TEA BUYING AND DRINKING HABITS IN FIVE CITIES IN AUSTRALIA

consumption of coffee and tea and beverage

The bar chart indicates the consumption of coffee and tea and beverage preferences in five cities in Australia, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart.

Regarding cafe visits, Melbourne has the highest proportion of dwellers having gone to a cafe for coffee or tea in the last four weeks, with approximately 64%, followed by Hobart (63%) and Sydney (61%). More than half of respondents in Brisbane reported recent cafe visits, while the lowest figure is for Adelaide at under 50%.

In terms of the purchase of the two types of coffee, instant coffee is favored over the fresh one. The majority of residents (54%) bought instant coffee in last month in Hobart. Brisbane, Adelaide, and Melbourne have roughly 53%, 50% and 48% respectively, whereas only about one in four of those surveyed in Sydney responded doing so. By contrast, Sydney has the largest percentage of residents having bought instant coffee last month with 44%. Melbourne, the second largest, has 42%, followed by Hobart with 8% lower. Equivalent statistics are seen in Brisbane and Adelaide with more than a third.

In summary, the illustration suggests that there is a positive correlation between the proportion of inhabitants going to a coffee shop and the proportion of fresh as well as instant coffee consumed.

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