the demand for tea and coffee and people's drinking habits
The given chart provides information regarding the outcomes of a survey about Sydney's Melbourne's Brisbane's, Adelaide's, and Hobart's residents' tea and coffee purchasing and drinking habits over a four-week period.
Overall, whereas the largest proportion of people preferred to go to a coffee shop for coffee or tea with the exception of Adelaide, where buying instant coffee was more popular, the least favored to buy fresh coffee.
In terms of having a coffee or tea in a café, while Hobart and Melbourne had the highest proportions, almost the same, at nearly 63%, Adelaide had the lowest percentage, where purchasing instant coffee was relatively more preferable. Furthermore, the figure of Brisbane and Sydney varied between 62% and 55%.
Focusing on buying instant coffee, whereas it made up the highest proportions in Hobart followed by Brisbane, at around 1% variance, it ranged from 50% to 45% for the remaining three cities, of which Sydney had the lowest contribution, reaching almost 46%.
Buying fresh coffee had the least popularity if compared to the other two habits. While, it was most popular in Sydney followed by Melbourne and then Hobart with around 44%, 42%, and 37%, respectively, it had lowest preference in Brisbane and Adelaide, at approximately similar level of 34%.
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