Colour can affect how people feel. How true is this statement?

please evaluate my essay! thank you very much!

Ielts Writing task 2: colour

Topic: Psycologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. so attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work?

Answer :
Nowadays, colour plays such a huge role in our emotional lives, from our living places to social contexts. this essay will discuss the colour affections out side of domestic lives, particularly in places such as offices and hospitals.

From my business perspective, people have been aware of the impact of colour on employees and customers. Some of the most successful companies like Facebook or Google are famous with the relaxed shades offices where the decorations in every contexts are suitable for innovative and effective atmosphere. If employees worked in an office that has too many and inapropriate colours or patterns on the walls, they would hardly pay attention and then make their work unproductive. Additionally, visitors and customers may be too curious with the colours surroundings them to focus on what they are looking for. As the result, an creative and efficient colours' place would be ideal work contexts for everyone.

Similarly, hospital colours codes are also conducted strictly to enhance patient's health. Bright colours would be less acceptable on a hospital ward, where patients are trying to recover from operations and sickness. In fact, relaxing colours are decorated such as pastels in order to create a cozy peaceful and energetic room for resting. On the other hand, children's room in hospital areas are likely to need some forms of entertainment; a wall that have nice pictures and posters in oranges and bright red. Also, doctors and nurses might prefer brighter surroundings when they take a break from work.

In conclusion, colours have a direct link to our feelings and It is vital to design our surrounding lives that the occupants could be able to have their best.

I can instantly spot some major grammatical errors in your writing. Could you please get your essay checked first before uploading? I recommend grammarly, where you can check these sneaky bugs for free: essayscam.org/forum/gt/grammarly-anti-plagiarism-checker-finding-previously-4995/

I will following discuss my view on how to do this topic right, and you can see that your key ideas wasn't answering the questions.

The topic asks us two questions How true is "...attention should be given to colour schemes...", and How far... So, what we need to do is state and explain the effect of colors to the performance of hospitals and offices. Since it is impossible to write each paragraph to answer each question, you made a good choice: one paragraph for hospitals and one for offices.

But, right in the topic sentence, you are suppose to give your general idea, for example: It is true that we must be carefully with color schemes in the workplace. You can see that your 1st paragraph doesn't have a quality topic sentence.

Similarly, your second paragraph doesn't give the needed answer.
Your conclusion doesn't do a great job in summarizing your ideas in body paragraph nor in restating your answer to the questions. The opening also did not five any information except your plan.

I suggest the following remedies for your essay, and also your writing(I believe that your writing quality will improve a lot if you take my advice seriously):

+ consult with grammarly to check grammatical errors for free before uploading your work
+ Know what is the big ideas and where to state them:
In the opening, you must give a general answer to the questions. Your plan ("t(consider capitalizing this t)his essay will ..") is optional.
In the ending, you'd be better off summarizing your ideas + answering the question. For example: Color design has a a strong correlation to the performance of organizations such as companies and hospitals, and we surely should pay due attention to this factor. (See how I repeat companies and hospitals to make the ending sound relevant. Don't oversee this!)

In the body paragraphs, pay more attention to your topic sentences: Directly answer the questions: Is it true and if it is, to what extreme?.

My try: For an office, it is true that options of color schemes should be considered thoroughly because poor choices, while might not drive the company out of business, can prevent the organization from reaching its highest potential.

Similarly, colors in a hospital, though may not decisively affect the conditions of patients and the performance of medical staff, can still have indirect effects to the recovering process and the service quality.

I hope my answer can help.

Ken, whatever you do, never use Grammarly for checking your grammar in the essays. It steals your essay and information which means you lose the rights to the essay that you just wrote. That is a very bad idea. Rather, read more English grammar rule books and do more grammar exercises. Both are available online as apps and neither will steal your essay information which might prove to be a problem for you in the future.

In reality, your essay is not bad at all. It can easily gain you a passing score at the very least because your discussion for the most part is clear and within the requirements of the prompt. You also show a clear idea of public understanding about the effects of color in the workplace and in a health care setting. That is fantastic because you allowed yourself to show how well read you are when it comes to current events and pop culture. That will definitely help in increasing your TA score.

The main problem I have with your writing is that in the opening paraphrase, you failed to answer the direct question regarding how true the statement is. However, you did good work in explaining that the essay will be about how the colors affect people in the workplace and recuperating places like hospitals. While this paragraph is missing one set of responses to the direct questions, you also neglected to provide the minimum 3 sentence format as the minimum requirement for the task 2 essay. You are also lacking the proper summary conclusion of the discussion since you left the essay open ended with a single sentence presentation. Aim to score better with at least 3 sentences so that you can show your English grammar and vocabulary skills to the examiner.

Overall, you have the potential to score at least a 5.5 - 6 with this type of writing. Which is a very good start for you.

Thanks for your advice, @Tunanut @Holt. I am really appreciate your comment about my writing.
I have known my problem with grammar but i feel really hard to improve it. Could you suggest any apps that i can properly study?