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Colour in offices and hospitals - how it impacts people?



JenJung0411 1 / -  
Apr 6, 2020   #1

Colour can affect how people feel



Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement ?

It is argued that colour has a huge impact on people's life. People have a linking for it are shown in how they decorate their house, what colour they wear, etc. As a result, it will also effect how we feel outside, the place particularly such as hospitals and offices.

Firstly, colour can effect how people feel. Every colour can be the symbol of every motion of people. For instance, in almost comics and cartoons, the red colour expresses the embarrassment of the characters, pink colour expresses the romance or love.

Secondly, when decorating space of hospitals or offices, people always choice the suitable color for each one : deep colour for office and bright color for hospital. In office, the worker usuallly take place an assembly or have deadline for work.Deep colour can make them feel comfortable and more relax. In addition, hospitals usually are decorated with warm and bright colour because of this shade of colour can affect the expression of patient. It make them more happy and their illness become better.

In conclusion, colour is very important to improve the mood of people. We should research on different shade of colour to make us more positive.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Apr 6, 2020   #2
Being a Task 2 essay, you have to meet the minimum 250 word requirement. You have only written 199 words which means you will receive enough point deductions in relation to the missing words that make up the 250 word minimum to fail the test. You have not written enough for the examiner to get a clear picture of how well you can express yourself in English and if you know enough English words to help you write a proper opinion paper.

The original discussion indicates a fact, scientist have already proven that colour has an effect on people. Therefore, you should not use the word "argue" since there is no debate being presented. Facts are facts so it should be stated as such in your paraphrase. Do not exaggerate, do not change the discussion slant.

The following part of the paraphrase section does not make any sense: People have a linking for it are shown in how they decorate ... Did you mean people have a liking for it? Generally, the sentence descriptor "linking" is misplaced and has removed the possibility of the reader even guessing what you are trying to say. Do not use the informal English words such as "etc." in a formal academic essay such as this one.

Make sure all of your paragraphs meet the minimum 3 sentence requirement throughout the essay. Otherwise, you will not meet the minimum word count. Majority of your paragraphs are little explained and supported in terms of reasoning and examples. The concluding paraphrase should represent the original discussion and your reasoning paragraphs, it should not be short under developed idea representations.


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