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'it is rather a common phenomenon for people to have debts' - causes of debts and prevention


moonvlin 2 / 7 3  
Dec 15, 2014   #1
Here comes the essay question:
Some people get into debt by buying things they dont need and can't afford. What are the reasons for the behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

My answer:

Nowadays, it is rather a common phenomenon for people to have debts than before, which might be a direct result of invention of credit card and a desire of trying to catch up with some trends. Since credit card has been being convenient for shopping, it tends to lure people to buy random items without paying for it right away.

Layaway plans could trick people who do not pay attention to their expenditure and keep a day book of their daily spending. Then, once the bill all come, people who overspent would easily in debt after they have a picture of how they have spent in months. Not only can credit cards drive people to buy the unnecessaries or some expensive ones by little amount of down payment, but also trends can stir up people's desire of popular hits. Fancy clothes, shoes, watches, and so on, especially some of which are endorsed by celebrities, are the blames for the debts from shopping blindly.

In my opinion, the best way to avoid any of these from happening is to figure out an arrangement plan for the money we earn by hard working, to know it clearly what's the mandatory items to buy and to set up a budget for monthly spending. Most important of all, think at least twice before we buy anything in shops or when we are about to click the payment button on computer.

To sum up, since we can't totally escape from credit card and commercials back up by celebrities, we need to pay attention of our spending habit. Therefore, we can uproot some bad expenditure habit and avoid from having debts by knowing where exactly did our money go.
Remansou 8 / 23 9  
Dec 15, 2014   #2
In IELTS task 2 you should write at least 250 words. Yours is short(232 words) and I'm afraid you'll lose mark because of that.

Not only can credit cards can drive people to buy....

Good Luck!
OP moonvlin 2 / 7 3  
Dec 15, 2014   #3
omg!! i didn't notice it is only 232 words!! thank for pointing out!!
Remansou 8 / 23 9  
Dec 15, 2014   #4
I also think a 4 paragraph essay would be more suitable for these kind of topics. The first one obviously is the introduction.The second one for description of the reasons and the third one for solutions. The last for conclusion. In this way, there would be a chance to explain your ideas more clearly.
OP moonvlin 2 / 7 3  
Dec 16, 2014   #5
thank you very much for your advice, i will rewrite it to meet 250 words and repost!
Anfalia 40 / 56 23  
Dec 17, 2014   #6
Since credit card is(has been)convient(convenient??) for shopping, people are tended to be lured to buy random items without paying for it in a right away. Layaway plans could trick people who do not keep a day book of their daily spending. Then, once the bill all come, people who overspent would easily in debt after they have a picture of how they have spent in months.
OP moonvlin 2 / 7 3  
Dec 18, 2014   #7
Whoever is reading it, thank you so much and I need your feedback!


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