Let's start off with a few grammar corrections:
An increasing number of people
begin to discuss whether company should use public recognition, not money to reward hard work ing .
- ... number of people havebegun
.. whether a
majority of people seem to believe that company should use public recognition instead of money to reward hard work
ing because it can save company 's money
- ... seem to believe that a
company... it can save the
money is the best reward
to people because it let people do what they want to do.
- best reward for
... it lets
We are living in a world
which everything need to buy with money.
- We are living in a world where one needs money in order to survive.
commodes is very much higher than the level in other countries.
- the price of commodities are
...than the cost
So, it is too mean that only give public recognition to reward the employees. Thus, it is clear that companies should use money to reward their worker s.
- Therefore, it would not be fair to only give public recognition to hardworking employees. The recognition is good but the employees need money.
In contrast, there is the common opinion that company should use public recognition
- that the
company should use...
money to reward hard work
ing because it can save company's money
employees motivation to work harder
- employees the
That is, they may think their employers are too stingy to give them money rewards,
might think... to give them financial
In conclusion, while this issue remains hotly debated with each side providing strong support
s That is, people need money to buy everything .
- Let me reiterate that people need money buy what they need to survive.
This essay is well thought out and crafted. You show a clear understanding of the prompt and offer a deep insight into the matter. Your discussion works well and your conclusion is a strong finish in my opinion. I hope my advice regarding the grammar issues helps you out :-)